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IELTS BAND 9 SAMPLE ESSAY


No.9
posted on OCTOBER 18, 2013

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The purpose of the IELTS Writing test is to evaluate your


ability to organize ideas, write an appropriate response to a
prompt, and accurately use a range of vocabulary and
grammar. What does it take to get a top score (Band 9) on
the IELTS Writing test? We’re going to break it down for you
here.

Sample answers are useful as study guides – especially for IELTS essay
band 9. Having access to previously completed work that you can have
con dence in will show you what you are missing!
Use the following sample and its explanations to see how close you are
to a band 9!

Contents

Evaluation Criteria

IELTS Essay Sample Question and Answer(1)

Why is this Essay a Band 9?

5 Tips for a Band 9 Essay

Sample IELTS Writing Task 2 Question and Answer(2)

Sample IELTS Writing Task 2 Question and Answer (3)

Useful De nitions of Advanced Vocabulary Used

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Video: Band 9 EX-IELTS Examiner Essay Review

Sample 19 IELTS Essays and 240 Task Questions Ebook

Video: Useful IELTS Writing Tip

Audio Resources

Additional IELTS Resources

Evaluation Criteria
IELTS Writing tests are evaluated across 4 dimensions:

1. Task Achievement – To what extent does the examinee address all


parts of the task with a fully developed position, inclusive of fully
extended and well supported ideas?
2. Coherence and Cohesion – Does the examinee logically organise
the information and ideas? Is the entire essay cohesive?
3. Lexical Resource – To what extent does the examinee use a wide
range of vocabulary with accuracy? Do they demonstrate
sophistication regarding the use of lexical items?
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy – Does the examinee use a range
of grammatical structures accurately?
The British Council (the administrator of the IELTS) outlines 9
different bands of performance for each of the above dimensions
here. Your scores in each of these dimensions are averaged to
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determine your overall band for your essay.

Let’s take a look at an example essay that scored as Band 9 and then
we’ll dig into each of these 4 areas to see why it received that score.

IELTS Essay Sample Question (1)


Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and
more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons
and speci c examples to explain your answer.

IELTS Essay Sample Answer (1)


Parents throughout the world place spend time reading with their
offspring to prepare them for school where their literacy skills are
further developed; however, recent research suggests that focusing on
reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun
activities would be far more bene cial. I am a strong advocate of this
approach, and the bene ts of it will be covered in this essay.
A fundamental reason for this is that there is no biological age for
reading, and pushing infants to acquire this skill before they are ready
could have repercussions. For example, in the UK, many boys are
reluctant readers, possibly because of being forced to read, and this
turned them off reading. By focusing on other activities and developing
other skills such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to

read, they usually acquire this skill rapidly. In addition, the importance
of encouraging creativity and developing a child’s imagination must be
acknowledged. Through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive
kill f l th lik l t l b l th h

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skills, for example, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through
context rather than learning it from a book.

Furthermore, play allows youngsters to mature emotionally, and gain


self-con dence. There is no scienti c research which suggests reading
at a young age is essential for a child’s development, moreover,
evidence suggests the reverse is true. In Finland, early years’ education
focuses on playing. Reading is only encouraged if a child shows and
interest in developing this skill. This self-directed approach certainly
does not result in Finnish school leavers falling behind their foreign
counterparts. In fact, Finland was ranked the sixth best in the world in
terms of reading.

Despite being a supporter of this non-reading approach, I strongly


recommend incorporating bedtime stories into a child’s daily routine.
However, reading as a regular daytime activity should be swapped for
something which allows the child to develop other skills.

Why is this Essay a


Band 9?
Task Achievement

According to the IELTS Writing Band Descriptors, an essay is Band 9 for


Task Achievement if it:

Fully addresses all parts of the task

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Fully addresses all parts of the task


Presents a fully developed position in answer to the question with
relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas.

In order to score well on Task Achievement, the most important thing is


to make sure you respond to what is being asked of you. Is the prompt
asking for an opinion, a discussion of a problem, a solution to a
problem, or some combination of these? If you provide an opinion and
not a solution when you’re being asked for a solution, you’re not going
to score well in this area. Read the question carefully!

The prompt for this essay asks: “To what extent do you agree [with the
previous statement]? Use reasons and speci c examples to explain your
answer.” It wants an opinion – with support!

This essay addresses all parts of this task. The opinion is included in the
introduction to make the writer’s position clear, and then the following
paragraphs support the writer’s position with examples and
justi cations. Overall, the response is full and relevant and each of the
points is detailed and connected to the thesis.

Coherence and Cohesion


Think of this as “How well does the essay ow? Is it easy to follow and
does it all tie together?”
The exact characteristics for a Band 9 C&C score are that an essay:

Uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention


Skilfully manages paragraphing

Note the speci c wording “it attracts no attention ” The goal here is for

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Note the speci c wording it attracts no attention. The goal here is for
things to sound natural and not forced. How do you connect your ideas
(ensure cohesion) without it sounding forced? I think there are 2
possible ways:

1. Explain your ideas in a logical order so that you don’t need many
linking words. This is probably what you do when writing in your
own language.
2. Use easy linking words like and, but, also, rstly, secondly, nally,
for example. These are so common that they attract almost no
attention.

This essay does a good job of this – you’ll notice that each paragraph
naturally (logically) follows the one prior, providing additional support
for the original opinion, and some simple linking words – in addition,
furthermore (both paragraph 2) and moreover (paragraph 3) – are used
throughout. These are all good discourse markers that show what is
coming next adds to the argument and are slightly more sophisticated
than rstly, secondly, and thirdly but don’t come across as being forced.

The other aspect to scoring high in C&C is ensuring an essay is well-


structured. What do I mean by that? A well-structured essay has a good
introduction, body paragraphs that are easy to follow and connect with
one another, and a good conclusion. Each body paragraph should also
have its own topic sentence and support and then smoothly transition
to the next paragraph.

Our sample essay has a “simple but good” introduction in which it shows
that the examinee has knowledge of the topic and clearly states the
writer’s position to set up the rest of the essay. The paragraphs all have
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topic sentences, which are then supported by examples, and are easy to
follow. The main body and conclusion relate back to the thesis in the
introduction.

A note on conclusions… there are two schools of thought when it comes


to how to conclude an IELTS essay. One is to conclude with one simple
sentence so that you spend more time perfecting your main body
paragraphs. The other is to wrap up with two sentences, once which
includes a small prediction (ie, how you think things might turn out) as
a way to show the examiner that you know how to correctly use another
tense (which will help boost your GR&A score – more on that in a
minute). Either is ne, just don’t forget your conclusion!

Taking time to plan out and organise your response before you start
writing is an extremely important step in scoring well in Coherence and
Cohesion – make sure you do so to ensure your essay is well structured
and reads cohesively when you’re done!

Lexical Resource
Scoring well in the Lexical Resource dimension is all about (correctly)
showing off your vocabulary. The description for a Band 9 here is:

Uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and


sophisticated control of lexical features, rare minor errors occur
only as ‘slips’

Collocations, topic speci c vocabulary and phrasal verbs are the name of
the game here. To score well, an examinee needs to show that they have
a wide-ranging vocabulary and they know how to use it.

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Our sample essay does a solid job of showing off a range of vocabulary
– you’ll notice that while the essay frequently refers to children, the
writer employs different vocabulary (infants, youngsters, offspring,
counterparts) to do so. Note: it is highly likely that you will need to refer
to people/children in your IELTS Writing task, so make sure that you
have lots of different words to use to refer to them. IELTS examiners do
not like to see the words “people,” “children” over and over again! The
same goes for the word “important” – make sure you have plenty of
alternative phrases (essential and vital are both used in our sample
essay).

Other examples of a wide-ranging vocabulary in our essay include using


rapidly in place of quickly, mature instead of develop, repercussions to
indicate a negative result, and acquire in place of learn.

Our sample essay also does a good job of using collocations – some
examples include “fundamental reason,” “reluctant readers” “social and
cognitive skills,” “learn vocabulary through context,” and “strongly
recommend.”

The correct use of phrasal verbs also demonstrates one’s grasp of


English – because of the semantics involved, they are sometimes one of
the most dif cult things for English language learners to master. Our
essay writer correctly uses a few of these including “turned them off”
and “falling behind.”

One note here: students preparing for the IELT S often ask if they should
use idioms (like “you’re barking up the wrong tree”) in their essays to
further demonstrate their grasp of the language. In my opinion, no, you
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shouldn’t. Idioms are informal by nature and not appropriate for a


written essay of this type. Stick with demonstrating your range of
vocabulary and your ability to use phrasal verbs correctly!

Grammatical Range & Accuracy


The nal scoring dimension is related to grammar and grammatical
structures – do you know them and can you correctly use them?

The Band 9 description for GR&A:

Uses a wide range of structures with full exibility and accuracy;


rare minor errors occur only as slips

Note that there is nothing in the scoring criteria about including speci c
tenses or sentence constructions. Your main objective should be to
reduce the number of mistakes that you make. An essay that contains no
mistakes is likely to get a 9 for grammar, regardless of the types of
sentence that it may or may not contain.

If there is a nice mix of long and short sentences in your essay, you’ll
meet the grammar requirements. Remember, as soon as you write a
“long” sentence you are naturally going to use connectives (linking
words), which will make the sentence ‘compound’ or ‘complex’. So, don’t
think too much about the grammar – just aim to reduce the number of
mistakes that you make, and try to include a few longer sentences.

Some examples from the sample essay that illustrate the writer’s
grammatical range and help it easily score as a band 9 include:

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appropriate uses of modal verbs in the passive voice: are further


developed,” “will be covered,” “must be acknowledged,” “should be
swapped.”
“to focus on” is correctly followed by an -ing form
However is used correctly with a semicolon before it and a comma
after
“because of,” “rather than,” and are correctly followed by -ing verbs

5 Tips for a Band 9


Essay
1. Answer what is being asked!
Make sure you read the prompt carefully and answer the questions
you’re being asked. I can’t emphasise this enough. In order to score well
on Task Achievement, you need to appropriately and fully address the
task.

2. Plan your work, work your plan.


Plan out your essay before you start writing. What are your main points?
What order are you going to make them in? How do they link together?
Having a well organised essay is key scoring high marks for Coherence

and Cohesion. Many IELTS test-takers will spend up to 10 minutes


planning out their essay before they start writing. A few points to keep
in mind:

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Your essay should have 4-5 paragraphs in total and at least 250
words
Plan your supporting points so that they don’t go off topic

3. Write, review, re-write


Write your essay, review it and then “rewrite” it. Don’t focus on getting
things perfect upfront – you don’t want to waste 15 minutes trying to
come up with the perfect synonym for something and then not have
enough time to nish your full essay! Write your essay rst (an unwritten
essay won’t score well at all!) and then go back through it to see how
you can improve it. Some questions to ask yourself at this stage:

Are there places where you can swap out stronger words for weaker
ones in order to improve your Lexical Resource score?
Are there places where you can phrase things differently in order to
illustrate your Grammatical Range?

4. Where are you falling?


To pass with a Band 9 the reality is you need two sets of skills:

Exam skills
Language skills

What are exam skills?

Can you plan an effective essay? Quickly? Ideally between 3-5 minutes.

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Can you think of enough ideas and examples to put in the essay plan?

Firstly you need to discover which of these skills you need. To do this
you write a lot of essays and then nd out which part of the essay
writing process is costing you the most amount of time, points or stress.

Personally the easiest and fastest way to get these skills is to do an


online course specialised in training students with these skills. Here is a
good course for that. (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/online-ielts-
course/)

5. Better language skills?


A lot of students fail the IELTS exam, and end up with 6.5. Also, a lot of
students go straight to Google and search for “IELTS Writing tips”, or
“Task two tips”. These tips might be helpful but sometimes the real
problem might just be in the language skills.

You see writing error free perfect sentences is probably much more of
challenge than you think, especially under exam conditions i.e in 40
minutes with immense pressure to pass.

The fastest way to improve your language skills is to get feedback. Ask
someone to review your written work and, you will probably be
surprised and disappointed. This is very common. Here

(https://www.ieltspodcast.com/essay-correction-service/) is a good
service that will review your essays for you and help you improve.

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Sample IELTS Writing Task 2


Question (2)
Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes
and solutions.

IELTS Essay Sample Answer (2)


The global phenomenon of urbanisation from the beginning of
industrialisation to the present day has brought opportunity and
prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life. With an increasing city
population, the complexity of the challenges also increases, the causes
and solutions for this are outlined below.

The causes for the decrease in the quality of life are paradoxically the
prosperity endowed on such metropolitan centres. Their growth is
largely due to the increase of opportunities on offer, which in turn
increases their attractiveness, essentially they are trapped in a positive
self-reinforcing cycle. However, this eventually leads to a decrease in
the quality of life as the city can experience overcrowding, exorbitant
property prices, and increased vulnerability to terrorist attacks. For
example the density of London makes it a more ef cient place to attack,
when compared to a smaller city such as Bradford. Therefore, due to
continuous growth and prosperity, urban citizens, especially the less
well off, often experience a lower standard of living.
Considering the solutions, greater investment in public transport would
ease traf c congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory this would reduce
air pollution, and possibly improve the wellbeing of the population if
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they did adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work. To counter
violent terrorist attacks, cities could embark on CCTV installations, so as
to closely monitor for threats. For example, it is said, the CCTV in
London has foiled many potential attacks, and therefore greatly
increased the security of its citizens.

To conclude, a wealthy city attracts a large population in ow, which


then causes pressure on existing infrastructure and security. Various
solutions exist to mitigate such drawbacks, nevertheless an inde nite
solution has yet to be found.

Sample IELTS Writing Task 2


Question (3)
Social media marketing can in uence what consumers buy. Do you agree
or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

IELTS Essay Sample Answer (3)


Since the introduction of social media applications in the early 2000’s
the world has become a much smaller place. Social media applications
such as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter have become information
sources for a majority of the global market. As such, I would agree that
marketing, which happens to be a source of information accessible on
these platforms can in uence the consumers who use them. This notion
is further aided by the rise in online retail stores who conduct the bulk
of their transactions online. This makes it easier for the consumer to
purchase from anywhere in the world.

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As a consumer on social media, you are constantly bombarded with


advertisements of various products that are speci cally designed to
catch your attention. This means that most of the adverts on your news
feeds aren’t random and will almost always feature something you have
previously searched online or something currently popular or trending.
Given the fact that most social media users are young consumers who
are in uenced by current trends and happenings these adverts will
almost always catch their eye.

The habit of sharing, retweeting and liking also ensures that these
adverts get around, quite fast. As such, when an advert does reach your
news feed you have already probably seen it on your friend’s news feed.
The truth is, adverts are a form of information and with the age of the
internet, information spreads faster than a wild re. Therefore, it only
makes sense that in the era and age of technology, globalization and
the need to be trendy, social media marketing can in uence what
consumers buy.

Useful De nitions of
Advanced Vocabulary
Used
Albeit

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Paradoxically

Equivalent sentences
“For example, it is said, the CCTV in London has foiled many potential
attacks, and therefore greatly increased the security of its citizens.”
Could also be said as:

“Statistics show that CCTV used in London has scuppered many a


terrorist plot, massively contributing to the security of its citizens.”

More Equivalent sentences


Various solutions exist to mitigate such drawbacks, nevertheless an
inde nite solution has yet to be found.

Could also be said as:

A myriad of partial xes exist for these issues, yet a permanent solution
is still out of reach.

Or even:

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Or even:

There are many methods employed to quell this ow of people, but still
a reliable solution has not been discovered.

Vocabulary booster
The highlighted sections in the following paragraph represent key
phrases or words relating to this topic. Study this paragraph to expand
your vocabulary knowledge on this topic:

The modern urban environment varies considerably depending on both


the city that produces it and the individual who perceives it; Each
experiencing a unique blend of at least some economic success, varying
degrees of localised or wider deprivation and periods of growth and
decline. Environmental factors permitting, a city will provide well for its
citizens as long as it can properly manage the execution of social policy.

Globalisation presents many challenges for those responsible for policy


as large in ows of people are to be expected in a place of success and
therefore opportunity; The ensuing mixing of cultures has far-reaching
social consequences that can affect how the city is both presented and
perceived.

Considerably
Con·sid·er·a·ble (kən-sĭd′ər-ə-bəl) adj.
1. Large in amount, extent, or degree: a writer of considerable in uence.
2 W th f id ti i i t Th id bl
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2. Worthy of consideration; signi cant: The economy was a considerable


issue in the campaign.

Perceive
Per·ceive (pər-sēv′) tr.v.
per·ceived, per·ceiv·ing, per·ceives
1a. To become aware of (something) directly through any of the senses,
especially sight or hearing: We could perceive three gures in the fog.
1b. To cause or allow the mind to become aware of (a stimulus): The ear
perceives sounds.
2. To achieve understanding of; apprehend: Einstein perceived that
energy and matter are equivalent.
3. To regard or consider; deem: an old technology that is still perceived
as useful; a politician who is perceived to be untrustworthy.

Deprivation
Dep·ri·va·tion (dĕp′rə-vā′shən) n.
1. The/an act or an instance of depriving; Loss.
2. The state of being deprived: social deprivation; a cycle of deprivation
and violence.

“The town’s generally miserable appearance led her to perceive it as a


place of considerable deprivation.”

Further Reading

There are many more writing samples for you to explore.

The BBC has great pages on discursive writing


(http://www bbc co uk/bitesize/standard/english/writing/discursive writi

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(http://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/standard/english/writing/discursive_writi
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Additional IELTS Resources


If you are looking to boost your Lexical Resource (25% of the IDP
marking criteria!), then check out this tutorial
(https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-vocabulary/ielts-vocabulary/) all
about IELTS vocabulary.
Sample essays for writing task two can be found here
(https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-writing-task/ielts-band-9-sample-
essay-no-9/), and sample letters for the general module can be found on
this page (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/general-task-1-sample-
essays/).
Alternatively you may be searching for some sample diagrams for the
academic component, this page (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/29-

sample-ielts-academic-task-1-graphs/) has pie charts, line graphs, and


bar charts, try writing a few answers.
If you are looking for help on how to start IELTS Writing Task 2 – there
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is a valuable video in this post (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-


writing-task/ielts-writing-start-ielts-writing-task-2/).
NEED TO PASS IELTS FAST? Or just tired of taking the exam too many
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Alternatively, you may just need to work on your grammatical range and
accuracy, so an essay correction will help you identify your errors so you
don’t make them again. This site (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/essay-
correction-service/) offers economical essay corrections.
Take advantage of the writing resources available online.  There are
many different style guides out there that provide examples of what
elegant academic writing looks like:
The University of Manchester Academic Phrasebook
(http://www.phrasebank.manchester.ac.uk/introducing-work/)
provides guidelines and examples of how to introduce topics,
discuss ndings and write conclusions
The University of Birmingham Guide to Academic Writing
(https://www.birmingham.ac.uk/Documents/students/guide-to-
academic-writing.pdf) provides tips on paraphrasing, in addition to
how to plan, structure and write an essay
Use these useful sentences for Writing Task Two
(https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-writing-task/extremely-useful-
sentences-2/).
This page (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-writing-task/topics-
answers/) is good for sample topics and answers, also for Task Two.

IELTS writing task 2 Sample Band 8


The writing part of your IELTS exam is a great place to score some extra
points, especially if you are looking to score within band 8. Here
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(https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-writing-task/difference-band-7-
band-9-essay/) is a task 2 writing sample to help you do just that.

Vocabulary for IELTS


Vocabulary is probably the most important part of preparing
successfully for IELTS. It is used for both the speaking and writing part
of the exam. Click here (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-
vocabulary/lexical-resource/) to view some essential vocabulary.

General essay topics


The ILETS exam have a number of general essay topics that span a
number of disciplines ad subject matters. To have an idea of what to
expect check out our list (https://www.ieltspodcast.com/ielts-writing-
task/topics-answers/)of general essay topics.

Comments

Farwa F.
JANUARY 18, 2016 AT 2:07 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
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My essay:

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing.  Discuss the causes
and solutions.

The quality of life in large cities is decreasing. If something is not done to

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combat this issue, the quality of life will continue on decreasing.

More and more people move into large cities in order to avail the facilities
which smaller cities don’t provide as much. Larger cities have more job
opportunities for people,and provide  more health care facilities, more
educational facilities, and more entertainment. However, as more people
start moving into large cities, the demands of people start to outweigh the
supply. In Dubai, where I live, for example, so many people had moved into
the city last year that there were more people and less housing units to
facilitate them. When the demand becomes more than the supply,  the price
of everything starts to rise.  Therfore, the rents started to reach the peaks.
This forced people who wernt able to afford the skyrocketing rents to move
into smaller and cheaper apartments, or to go on sharing apartments with
one or more families. Supply demand imbalance has also caused food to
become more expensive, forcing people to go for alternative, cheaper
products of lower quality.

If we start to work now, we can help improve the quality of life in big cities
in the near future. Construction companies need to plan ahead and start
constructing more housing units from now. Furthermore, more of local food
should be produced in the country to provide people with cheaper food
alternatives in the growing market

In conclusion, larger cities have lower the standard of life for many.
However, if we start to work now, we would be able to combat this problem
in the near future 

Pondering Psychopath

MAY 8, 2016 AT 8:07 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-


TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-271)

Yes, it is a good attempt. I do not know if this reply is in time for your
examination but it might help others Here are my views:

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examination, but it might help others. Here are my views:


Find synonyms of common words. In your essay, the word “more” is
spewn-out in an inordinate amount.
Consider changing the length of sentences. Concise, then lengthy:Add
variety.
Use formal English. Speci cally, use ‘were not’ instead of weren’t.

These are just basic fundamental tips to add air to your writing and to
make you appear well-versed, but they might do wonders for your
writing score.

Farwa F.
JANUARY 18, 2016 AT 2:04 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-266)

Hey guys. I have my ielts exam in a few days. Can I post my essay here in
this topic? I would be so grateful if u all can give me a feedback on it. (An
an expected band)

bw
APRIL 21, 2016 AT 10:59 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-270)

Hi,
You can get your essay checked here: http://www.ieltswritingtask.net
(http://www.ieltswritingtask.net)

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MONIKA SORATHIYA
NOVEMBER 28, 2015 AT 10:28 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-265)

I GOT 9 BAND

Faizak
FEBRUARY 8, 2016 AT 11:28 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-268)

How you got in writting ? Please tell us

bw
FEBRUARY 18, 2016 AT 3:37 AM
(HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-TASK/ IELTS-BAND-9-
SAMPL E-ESSAY-NO-9/#COMMENT-269)

Hi, I would check out the tutorials here:


http://www.sentenceguide.com/ (http://www.sentenceguide.com/)

Sandeep Kulkarni
NOVEMBER 19, 2015 AT 5:59 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-263)

I had a question related to third paragraph.


” Considering the solutions, greater investment in public transport would
ease traf c congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory this would reduce air
pollution, and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they did

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adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work.”

Could the above lines be written in future tense as follows


Considering the solutions,greater investment in public transport will ease
traf c congestion, as will bike lanes.In theory this will reduce air pollution
and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they will adopt a
more active lifestyle.

bw
NOVEMBER 20, 2015 AT 3:37 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-264)

Hi,
You can write “Considering the solutions,greater investment in public
transport will ease traf c congestion, as will bike lanes.
– Is ok but the original sounds better because it’s all hypothetical.

In theory this will reduce air pollution and possibly improve the well-
being of the population if they will adopt a more active lifestyle.
Is a conditional sentence, so it needs “DID”, not WILL.
Sharp observations Sandeep!

HARMAN
AUGUST 16, 2015 AT 11:48 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-261)

HOW I GET 8 BAND IN SPEAKING

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bw
OCTOBER 6, 2015 AT 1:22 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-262)

Practice, practice, practice. Also get some feedback.

RUPALI (HT TP://RUPALIKAM RA27@GMAIL. COM)


JULY 25, 2015 AT 3:21 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-260)

I got ecellent material for that I searched a lot


thanks a lot

shyna
JUNE 23, 2015 AT 6:05 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-259)

it is very good essay for reading and collect some ideas

Javharali Al Tashkenti

JUNE 4, 2015 AT 12:18 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-


TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-257)

Hello to everyone, my Name is Javharali. I would like to be a member of this


great IELTS house I do not know English as good as you but I think with

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great IELTS house. I do not know English as good as you but, I think with
the help of you I will became a professional user of this language. Thanks

JAVHARALI AL TASHKENTI (HT TPS://IELTSPODCAST.COM)


JUNE 4, 2015 AT 7:10 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-258)

Hi

Phương
MAY 30, 2015 AT 8:59 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-256)

It is a wonderful essay. I think it is dif cult to reach. Thanks to the poster .

Phương
MAY 30, 2015 AT 8:58 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-255)

It is a wonderful essay. I think it is dif cult to reach. Thank u to the poster .

nosa
APRIL 28, 2015 AT 12:34 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-254)

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… emdowed with or endowed on?

which one is correct?

Xheni
OCTOBER 1, 2014 AT 8:41 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-253)

this essay is absolutely unreachable!


I will never score a 9 in my life!

kevin
AUGUST 29, 2014 AT 4:51 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-252)

wow pal
there is one question in my mind
how to remember such vocabularies haha
so hard dude
but you’ve done it..
congo….

Patricia
JUNE 20, 2014 AT 12:41 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-251)

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I felt the same as Gustavo…I couldn’t get a 9 even in Portuguese, my native


language. But I’ll keep on taking notes of important words to use on the
essay.

Thanks!!

DR SACHIN NANDEDKAR
(HT TP://WWW.HEIGHTGROWAYURVEDA . COM)
JUNE 13, 2014 AT 6:40 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-250)

write no.of words . great balanced essay

DR SACHIN (HT TP://WWW.AYURVEDAMITRA . COM)


JUNE 12, 2014 AT 3:26 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-249)

Write no of words in brake. Great balanced essay.

Shokhsanam
APRIL 23, 2014 AT 8:21 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-W R ITING-
TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-248)

Well wrìtten but i would give 8.0 for this essay.

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Gustavo Revilla
JANUARY 15, 2014 AT 4:21 PM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-247)

Great essay! and after reading it I think I’m not going to be able to write a
9-band essay in my life hahaha

Thanks for share it Ben!

Regards from Venezuela

Quan
NOVEMBER 7, 2013 AT 9:04 AM (HT TPS://WWW.IELTSPODCAST.COM/IELTS-
WRITING-TASK/IELTS-BAND-9-SAMPLE-ESSAY-NO-9/ #COMMENT-246)

Why did the last sentence use the word “inde nite” instead of “de nite”?
May anyone give me an explanation? Thanks.

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