Examples Explanation/ details Commented [MOU1]: Good work in your TGAS!

Paraphrasing
Summarize the author’s attitude to the topic I think it would be inappropriate to get
with few sentences, along with my general into details in the first paragraph, so I
response. only use few sentences to introduce the
topic and author’s argument in the first
paragraph. Also, I summarize the topics I
would response to in the following
paragraphs, as it would give a brief
introduce to the reader.
Quoted the author’s words, and paraphrase When I try to introduce the author’s
into my own words. opinion about humanoids’ emotion, I
found that hard to give a vivid picture of
it. So I quote him first and paraphrase his
view as explaining to the reader, so that
they would have a better understanding
about what the author and me are trying
to talk about.
Paraphrasing the author’s idea with partly In paraphrasing the author’s idea about
quotation. the future of humanoids, I try to use a
new method of “partly quotation” since
his view was discrete, separated in many
sentence. Then, I paraphrase his view
again in my words to make clear of what
he is talking about.
Collocations
Emotion(n.) I use emotion for eight times in my
Verb + emotion: passage, as emotion is a major topic I’m
Construe emotion discussing about, but almost all emotion
Adj + emotion: in the earlier draft refer to “human
Profound emotion emotion”, I guess I can improve it by
different collocations.

Technology(n.) The passage is about technology, but in

Adj + technology earlier draft I use “technology” without
Existing technology any collocations, so I changed that
Verb + technology problem in the final draft.
Develop technology

Future(n.) The future is another topic I usually used,

Adj + future but in the passage, “future” was only
Foreseeable future collocated with “the”, so I replaced with
some other adjectives.
Signal phrases/ reporting language
Bruemmer suggested that The following words quoted was more
Into like an argument instead of suggestion.
Bruemmer maintained that So I changed the word.
He argued that In the first paragraph the “stated” will be
Into more formal than “argued”.
He stated that
Bruemmer harbors a sanguine perspective I read this in my miserable GRE Commented [MOU2]: lol
reading…its quite fancy, I decide to use it
Commented [MOU3]: it is quite fancy- but not
in my own passage.
completely rare. It stands out a little, sounding
a bit inflated, but is fine.