John Hanley

Professor Campbell

URWT-1104

30 November 2018

Studio 6 Revision

My reflection of Bruce Ballenger’s Chapter on Revision

Bruce Ballenger’s wisdom on writing and the revision process was helpful, especially

when I am working on the revision process now. The most important thing I took away from the

article was the fact that he revises his work to look for errors that aren’t grammatical. He looks

for gaps in which he missed information or areas where maybe he has too much information.

When I would revise my work in high school I focused on grammatical errors and how I could

improve my sentence structure and other grammatical mishaps. I think the most boring or

unhelpful part of the chapter was when Ballenger talked about the use of other readers as

revisers. He noted that having a second pair of eyes reading the paper can contribute to finding

mistake that the writer didn’t catch. This is all information I had already known, usually when I

write a paper I try to find someone else to re-read it to catch other mistake that I didn’t catch. I

think the biggest strategy that I took away from Ballenger’s wisdom is the use of revising for

non-grammatical errors. Previously, I was strictly focused on finding grammatical errors that I

wouldn’t look for ways I could improve the information in my paper which is probably more

important than the grammatical errors. Ballenger helped me realize that it is important to find

ways you can better your information. Look for areas where you could add information and look

for areas where you could delete information. Also, I learned about the process of re-researching
which is something I never used, and I had never really been introduced to it. Re-researching will

help me implement important information into my second draft.

The Margin Outline

Paragraph #1-Introduction to the disorder

Paragraph #2 - Introduction to the treatment drugs of ADHD

Paragraph #3 Stimulants vs. Non-stimulants

Paragraph#4- Symptoms of the drugs

Paragraph #5-addiction linked with meds

Paragraph #6- signs of addiction

Paragraph #7- positives of Medication

Paragraph #8- conclusion

I. 1st Paragraph (ADHD wasn’t recognized till 1955)

a. Next Point (over prescription of ADHD meds is an epidemic)

b. NP (benefits and consequences of the drugs)

c. NP (ADHD has become a hot topic)

d. NP (Doctors are willing to prescribe to anyone)

II. 2nd Paragraph (three most popular drugs are)

a. NP (drugs increases ability for everyday task)

b. NP (increases dopamine levels)

c. NP (Dopamine is a neurotransmitter linked to motivations)

d. NP (Where these stimulants differ in symptoms)

 e. NP (Share common symptoms, but no drugs share the exact same symptoms)

f. NP (if a patient feels intolerable symptoms)

g. NP (Stimulants improve day to day life’s)

III. 3rd Paragraph (two classes of medication)

a. NP (stimulants are effective as soon as they enter the bloodstream, which takes

about 45 minutes

b. NP ( easy to find the right dose for children

c. NP (non-stimulants take 5 to 7 days to see effects)

d. NP (non-stimulants are less common)

e. NP (finding optimal dose may take a month)

IV. 4th Paragraph ( effects differ between adults and children)

a. NP (most common stimulant drug is Adderall)

b. NP (Adderal varies on effects between person to person)

c. NP (medication effect diminishes as children take the drug)

d. NP (people’s varying reactions with the drugs makes it hard for doctors to

determine the best dose)

V. 5th Paragraph (ADHD medication can lead to addiction)

a. NP (rat studies W/ Ritalin lead to more drug addiction in rats)

b. NP (Addiction is a huge issue in the U.S)

c. NP (high school use with alcohol/ to lose weight)

d. NP (kids snorts pills or crush)

VI. 6th paragraph (Many physical signs of addiction)

 a. NP ( one of the most common signs of addiction are vision, nausea, diarrhea,

constipation)

b. NP (children have headaches during day)

c. NP (relevant weight loss and appetite loss)

d. NP (Physical and mental signs of addiction)

e. NP (Prescription drugs addicts experience angry outburst)

f. NP (Addicts experience restlessness and increase of talking)

g. NP (possible hallucinations and nervousness)

VII. 7th Paragraph (positives of medicine)

a. NP (ADHD works as a stimulant, upon entering the blood stream patients are

expected to see the effects of the drug)

b. NP (reduce the symptoms of ADHD, leading users to become less hyperactive)

c. NP (reactions to drug vary from person to person)

d. NP (the drugs are managed and designed and managed to treat different

symptoms)

e. NP (number of children diagnosed with ADHD has spiked 40 percent)

f. NP (people treated with medication are less likely to suffer from chronic health

problems)

g. NP (Less children are being diagnosed with substance abuse, various STD’s and

unwanted pregnancies”

VIII. 8th Paragraph (recent surge in ADHD medication being produced)

a. NP (Medication such as Adderall can be easy for kids to get their hands on even if

they are not diagnosed with the disorder)

b. NP (positive effects in most people who actually struggle with the disorder)

c. NP (The drug needs to used positively by the community)