Dear Sheila,

You have no idea how thrilled I am to hear from you. We haven’t been in
touch since you moved to Canterbury last month. Thank you so much for your
thoughtful invitation to spend a few days in Canterbury, I’d love to go, but I
won´t be able to make it though. Unfortunately, this couple of weeks has been Commented [R1]: Better:: the last couple of weeks have been
……
extremely chaotic for me. Register: Would it be possible to put off the trip? What
about the New year’s break?

As you know, I’ve been attending a Masters English course and it has been
quite demanding lately. Besides, the finals are near and I have to catch up with a
lot of paper work. I was supposed to hand in a couple of essays in previous
lessons; they’re overdue now. Would it be possible to postpone this trip before Commented [R2]: Register: Would it be possible to put off the
trip? What about the New year’s break?
Christmas holidays? I‘d surely be there by then to explore Canterbury Cathedral
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and its local coast and lovely country side as you highly recommended me in
your last letter.

I hope you will excuse me for refusing the invitation. Send my regards to
the kids, I miss them terribly! I promise I’ll pay them a visit soon, but for now I
wish you a Merry Christmas filled with peace and joy.

All the best,

Mary.

Comment: As an alternative holiday has been suggested I have finished the

email differently.

Dear Professor Jones,

I do not know if you still remember me, sir. I was one of your students
in your Art History classes last year. My name is Lorena Genin and I´m writing Commented [R4]: Do not use contractions in formal emails.

to you because I require a reference for a job application. I’m applying for the
position as a tourist guide at an old fishing village in Ushuaia. Commented [R5]: of tourist guide

The city offers tourists around the world a magnificent old building that has
been there since 1979: the End of the World Museum. This museum is in charge
of preserving the historical roots of Tierra del Fuego and treasuring the heritage
of the town.

As you have been a great teacher and a positive influence in my career, it Commented [R6]: influence on

would be an honour if I could list you as a reference on my CV. My employee Commented [R7]: employer

will be in contact with you to ask you a few questions so as to see if I am

suitable for the position. I hope that this does not cause you any
inconvenience.

Yours sincerely,

Lorena Genin

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Comments:

There are some problems with accuracy and appropriacy, particularly in the email to Sheila but
in general both emails are fine.