Criterion Undocumented Minimal 1 Basic 2 Proficient 3 Advanced 4 Comments

0 Unacceptable Acceptable Acceptable Acceptable

Unacceptable
Idea The statement The Statement Using Using 2.
Development does not statement logically generally sound Each paragraph
address expresses the develops the sound assumption had logic, but
the author’s author’s author’s assumption s and because of the
views about the views about views about s and arguments, development
purposes of the purposes the arguments, the of the
education, of education, purposes of based in statement paragraphs, it
guiding guiding education, practical logically was a bit
educational educational guiding experience, develops confusing at
principles, principles, educational the the times. Each
understanding understandin principles, statement author’s paragraph
of learning, g of learning, understandi logically views mentioned
and/or the most and/or the ng of develops about the something
appropriate most learning, the purposes of different you
strategies for appropriate and/or the author’s education, wanted to do
teaching. The strategies for most views guiding while teaching,
statement is teaching, but appropriate about the educational but I could not
incoherent or is ambiguous strategies purposes of principles, figure out your
extremely brief or not for teaching. education, understand actual
or contains connected. However, guiding ing of philosophical
major logical the educational learning, statement
inconsistencies. statement is principles, and/or the when it comes
not always understand most to teaching.
consistent ing of appropriate
and/or learning, strategies
convincing. and/or the for
most teaching.
appropriate Statement
strategies includes
for sound
teaching. ethical or
psychologic
al
arguments
and not
just
practical
ones.
Illustrative No Supporting Examples in Supporting Specific 4.
Examples illustrative examples are support of examples examples You gave
examples are inadequate or points are from the from the several
included. of unclear relevant but writer’s writer’s examples that
relevance. general or experience personal were personal
not based in are specific experience, to your life
experience. and academic experiences in
pertinent. work, or school. Each
field example you
experience gave were over
illustrate different
points in a topics. The
 vivid or example of the
memorable student
way. changing his
ways after his
teacher spoke
to him was
memorial, and
it also made
me think about
why I want to
become a
teacher.
Quality of The statement The The The In addition 1.
Writing is very difficult statement, statement is statement to being I could read
to read though understanda is clear, clear, well the paper and
because of its comprehensi ble plus two well organized, understand
style, usage, ble, has of the organized, free from what you were
mechanics, or obvious following: free from errors of trying to say,
organization. problems in 1) organized, errors of mechanics but there were
two of the 2) free from mechanics and usage, grammar
following errors of and usage, and written mistakes, use
areas: style, mechanics and written in an of conjunctions
usage and and usage, in an appropriate to start a
mechanics, or 3) in an appropriate academic sentence,
organization. appropriat academic style, the words were
e style. statement: misspelled,
academic 1) has a and some of
style. single, the paragraphs
unifying were a bit
theme confusing to
and read and
2) is repetitive.
strongly
suggestiv
e of the
writer’s
voice.
I love your passion that you have for teaching. I share that same
passion. My overall comment would be to cut out some of the
Additional repetitive sentences, have one clear statement that will tell what
Comments your philosophy is. If your philosophy contains several things, I
Total: 7
would recommend a thesis statement that mentions each thing you
will talk about, and to check comma placements and spellings.
Reviewee: Lane Scott Date: 3/10/19

Evaluator: Victoria Sanchez Date: 3/10/19