Criterion Undocumented Minimal 1 Basic 2 Proficient 3 Advanced 4 Comments

0 Unacceptable Acceptable Acceptable Acceptable

Unacceptable

Idea The statement Statement Statement Using generally Using sound Great job,
Development does not expresses the logically sound assumptions and Valeria! In the
address the author’s views develops the assumptions and arguments, the beginning I think
author’s views about the author’s views arguments, statement it might be better
about the purposes of about the based in logically if you spent less
purposes of education, purposes of practical develops the time on what led
education, guiding education, experience, the author’s views you to teaching.
guiding educational guiding statement about the (I’m not saying
educational principles, educational logically purposes of don’t talk about
principles, understanding of principles, develops the education, your struggles,
understanding of learning, and/or understanding author’s views guiding but maybe leave
learning, and/or the most of learning, about the educational out the reasons
the most appropriate and/or the most purposes of principles, you thought you
appropriate strategies for appropriate education, understanding of didn’t want to be
strategies for teaching, but is strategies for guiding learning, and/or an educator.
teaching. The ambiguous or teaching. educational the most Spend more time
statement is not connected. However, the principles, appropriate (like you did at
incoherent or statement is not understanding of strategies for the end when you
extremely brief always learning, and/or teaching. said that teaching
or contains consistent the most Statement would be
major logical and/or appropriate includes sound rewarding) talking
inconsistencies. convincing. strategies for ethical or about why and
teaching. psychological how you want to
arguments and teach.
not just practical
ones.
Illustrative No illustrative Supporting Examples in Supporting Specific I love that you
Examples examples are examples are support of examples from examples from used your
included. inadequate or of points are the writer’s the writer’s teacher as an
unclear relevant but experience are personal example of a
relevance. general or not specific and experience, lifelong mentor. I
based on pertinent. academic work, believe you
experience. or field illustrated very
experience well that you want
illustrate points to be an educator
in a vivid or like her, and
memorable way. impact lives like
she’s impacted
yours.
Quality of The statement The statement, The statement The statement is In addition to Your statement
Writing is very difficult though is clear, well being clear, well was written very
to read comprehensible, understandable organized, free organized, free well, there were a
because of its has obvious plus two of the from errors of from errors of few sentences
style, usage, problems in two following: mechanics and mechanics and that could be
mechanics, or of the following 1) organized, usage, and usage, and reorganized to
organization. areas: style, 2) free from written in an written in an clean it up a bit,
usage and errors of appropriate appropriate and make it flow
mechanics, or mechanics academic style. academic style, better.
organization. and usage, the statement:
3) in an 1) has a
appropriat single,
e unifying
academic theme and
style. 2) is strongly
suggestive
of the
writer’s
voice.

Additional Great job, Valeria. I applaud you on achieving this despite your struggles. You are Total: 10 pts
Comments
an inspiration to many young mothers, I’m sure. I know you’ll make an exceptional
teacher!

Reviewee: Valeria Guerra Date: 6/23/19

Evaluator: Nicholas Foster Date: 6/23/29