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Cohesion
Coherence
WORKSHOP #2 • Grammar
WHAT IS WRONG WITH THESE?
Failure of coherence
AND THIS?
Coherence:
The logical flow of ideas
Conceptual properties that unify a sentence, paragraph
or text
Cohesion:
The grammatical tools that we use to indicate unity
Source: www.andertoons.com
TEXT HACKS
Linking devices:
PRONOUNS
eg. I/me/mine, he/him/his, she/her/hers, we/us/ours,
they/them/their, it/its, one(s)
RELATIVE PRONOUNS
eg. who, which, that, when, where
DETERMINERS
eg. this, that, these, those, my
DEFINITE ARTICLE
ie. the
SENTENCE CONNECTORS
eg. and, but, so, however, furthermore, although, nevertheless,
in contrast, as a consequence
TEXT HACKS
INCOHERENT
1. Percy Sledge has died, and Percy
Sledge’s funeral will be on Saturday.
(pronoun)
INCOHERENT IMPROVED
1. Percy Sledge has died, and Percy 1. Percy Sledge has died, and his
Sledge’s funeral will be on Saturday. funeral will be on Saturday.
(pronoun)
2. Percy Sledge has died. Percy Sledge 2. Percy Sledge, who was famous for
was famous for singing “When a Man singing “When a Man Loves a
Loves a Woman”. (relative pronoun) Woman”, has died.
3. Percy Sledge has died. His music will 3. Percy Sledge has died but his music
live on. (connector) will live on.
4. Percy Sledge sang “When a Man 4. Percy Sledge sang “When a Man
Loves a Woman”. “When a Man Loves a Woman”. The song became
Loves a Woman” became a number a number one hit in 1966.
one hit in 1966. (definite article)
TEXT HACKS
OKAY:
A famous singer and guitarist committed
suicide in 1994. The musician was only 27
years old.
WEIRD:
A famous singer and guitarist committed
suicide in 1994. Kurt Cobain was only 27
years old.
AN EVERYDAY EXAMPLE
VOCABULARY
formal/academic (vs. informal)
impersonal (vs. personal)
unemotional (vs. emotional)
SENTENCE STRUCTURE
use of passive structures
nominalisation
PASSIVE VOICE
PASSIVE VOICE
Passive:
A drop in CD sales was observed.
PASSIVE VOICE
ORIGINAL:
Five rich young Oxfordshire guys put
together Radiohead in 1991 and this had a
huge effect on rock music over the next 15
years.
ACADEMIC TONE
ORIGINAL:
Five rich young Oxfordshire guys put
together Radiohead in 1991 and this had a
huge effect on rock music over the next 15
years.
Vocab:
Five young middle-class Oxfordshire
musicians formed Radiohead in 1991 and
this was to have a substantial effect on
rock music over the next 15 years.
ACADEMIC TONE
ORIGINAL:
Five rich young Oxfordshire guys put
together Radiohead in 1991 and this had a
huge effect on rock music over the next 15
years.
Passive sentence structure:
Radiohead was formed in 1991 by five
young middle-class musicians from
Oxfordshire and this was to have a
substantial effect on rock music over the
next 15 years.
ACADEMIC TONE
ORIGINAL:
Five rich young Oxfordshire guys put
together Radiohead in 1991 and this had a
huge effect on rock music over the next 15
years.
Nominalisation:
Radiohead’s formation in 1991 by five
young middle class musicians from
Oxfordshire was to have a substantial
effect on rock music over the next 15
years.
REFERENCES
Books:
Clanchy, J. and Ballard, B. (1997). Essay writing for students .
Melbourne: Addison Wesley Longman.
Copus, J. (2009). Brilliant writing tips for students .
Basingstoke, Hampshire: Palgrave Macmillan.
Godfrey, J. (2011). Writing for university . Houndmills,
Basingstoke, Hampshire: Palgrave Macmillan.
Pinker, S. (2014). The Sense of Style: The Thinking Person's
Guide to Writing in the 21st Centur y . London: Allen Lane.
Strunk, W. and White, E. (1988). The elements of style . New
York: Macmillan.
Turner, M. (2011). Clear and Simple as the Truth . Princeton
University Press.
REFERENCES
Web:
University of Melbourne: Improving cohesion
University of Melbourne: Connecting Ideas in Academic
Writing
University of Melbourne: Academic Style
University of Melbourne: Developing Clarity and Focus
University of Melbourne: Essay Writing Guide
University of Wollongong Academic Writing website