rd 1st project .

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by James Weaver

Submission date: 16-Sep-2019 10:14PM (UTC-0700)

Submission ID: 1174277768
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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James--Good work here. A solid start to your writing
this semester. Your voice and prose are clear. Your
story is strongest in the paragraph with your dad.
Further reflection on the rhetorical situations could help
draw out more details and tell more of a story about

/100
events in high school.

PAGE 1

Text Comment. Maybe a stronger title or no title?

QM Structure | SLO #4
Structure. Reflect on organization and how to move your argument forward.
Additional Comment

Continue to consider your opening paragraph. Perhaps develop more of an opening where you
discuss the problem and then start your story in the second paragraph.

QM Transition
Create a transition here as you move from one subject to the next.

Text Comment. no comma

Text Comment. hyphen

Text Comment. in

PAGE 2

QM Focus | SLO #1

Try to shift your discussion more clearly to assigned topic.

Additional Comment

Focus on events in high school.

 Comment 1 | SLO #4

Continue to add details to show specific examples of problem. What did you say that was incorrect?

QM Focus | SLO #1

Try to shift your discussion more clearly to assigned topic.

Additional Comment

Focus is supposed to be on high school. Consider also how to focus on 1 problem and tell one story.
This is reading like a 5 paragraph essay with 3 different points.

QM Structure | SLO #1
Structure. Reflect on organization and how to move your argument forward.
Additional Comment

Continue to reflect on elements of narrative.

PAGE 3

Text Comment. good dialogu

QM Structure | SLO #4
Structure. Reflect on organization and how to move your argument forward.
Additional Comment

Expand narrative and plot. Give examples of using this at school and having success.

Text Comment. am

Strikethrough.

QM Clarify | SLO #2:

clarify wording or idea
Additional Comment

Clarify--how was this demonstrated in your narrative. What did you learn that was not instructive?
Perhaps reword.

QM Punctuation
reflect on punctuation

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RUBRIC: NARRATIVE WRITINGACOPY

SLO #1 Proficient
Understand and apply key rhetorical concepts to written assignments. These concepts include assessment of
the writer's role, purpose for writing, consideration of audience and the influence of context and culture in
rhetorical situations.

ABSENT OR BELOW Lacks awareness of audience and purpose. Narrative is missing a central plot and fails to
BASIC connect story to advice on literacy.

DEVELOPING Shows some awareness of audience and purpose by telling a story and offering advice.
However, issue and main idea are unfocussed and narrative is not cohesive. Story fails to
make its point through the use of descriptive language and sensory details that connect
with reader.

PROFICIENT Demonstrates sufficient awareness of audience and purpose by telling a clear story to
support central idea. Story is told with specific descriptions and suitable language choices,
but sensory details are minimal, and the story lacks tension to draw the reader in.

ADVANCED Shows sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Uses personal narrative to
support purpose. Uses the elements of narrative to hold reader’s attention and persuade.

SLO #2: Proficient

Use critical thinking skills to analyze, synthesize, and evaluate.

ABSENT OR BELOW Narrative fails to reflect deeply upon problems in literacy or how to correct those
BASIC problems. No reflection is shown on personal experience.

DEVELOPING Narrative begins to reflect personal experience but backs away from deep consideration
of literacy issues.

PROFICIENT Narrative includes reflection upon experience and connection to advice offered reader but
lacks originality.

ADVANCED Narrative includes deep critical thinking about writer’s past experience. These
observations present original insight and stimulates reader’s interest.

SLO #3: Advanced

Take part in all aspects of the writing process. Final paper shows evidence of revision, editing, and proofreading.

ABSENT OR BELOW Paper has missed repeated workshops, demonstrates limited revision and editing.
BASIC Spelling, syntax, word choice, or punctuation errors impede readability.

DEVELOPING Paper has participated in workshops, but revision and editing are limited. Spelling, syntax,
diction, or punctuation errors often impede readability or otherwise distract from meaning.

PROFICIENT Paper demonstrates full awareness of the writing process, although revision remains
superficial. Editing and proofreading are thorough so that spelling, syntax, word choice,
and punctuation errors are few and do not distract from meaning.
ADVANCED Paper demonstrates full awareness of the writing process, including deep holistic revision.
Editing and proofreading skills are strong as evident in writing is clear, engaging, and free
of errors.

SLO #4 Proficient
Conform to the genre conventions of different writing modes while also applying a personal approach/voice to
create original writing.

ABSENT OR BELOW Elements of narrative of missing. Story lacks plot. Organization is unclear, and no
BASIC controlling statement is present. No concern for style is evident.

DEVELOPING Story includes some elements of narrative, but some need further development. Plot lacks
tension or conflict and organization is scattered. A weak controlling statement appears.
Little concern for style is evident.

PROFICIENT Narrative includes clear description of setting, detailed characterizations, and a well
organized plot. Plot may lack tension and controlling statement may need further
reflection. Style is consistent with audience and purpose, and voice demonstrates some
originality.

ADVANCED Narrative presents a clear engaging story, with vividly detailed descriptions, setting, and
characters. Plot is engaging and developed fully. Writing demonstrates original style and
outstanding control of language.