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Abstract
This paper considers how ‘free writing’, derived from the automatic
writing of the surrealists, can be used with students in writing poetry in
order to emulate the successful practice of established writers. The paper
considers how form can be taught, specifically line breaks and stanza
breaks, both in relation to free writing and in reiation to drafting, and
argues that drafting should be considered an extension of the creative act
of writing rather than as something which is dore afterwards ‘to’ pre-
existing work.
Key Words
free writing, improvisation, line breaks; drafting
Introduction
T h s paper arises from my own practice as a poet, my work as a teacher,
my experience of working with other poets in the workshop situation and
my practice-based research into creative writing and poetics. In Jumpstarst
Poety in the Seconday School I explore the way in which the techniques
of writers’ workshops can be used in the classroom (Yates, 1999). In this
paper, I consider the value of free writing in the classroom, as used in
writers’ workshops. in relation to examples of students’ work, arguing that
the use of this technique provides access to a procedure used by
practising writers. Further, experience of focusing on the use of line and
stanza breaks, with reference both to the work of established poets and
their own poems, allows students to make creative and conscious
decisions about how to match form and content in their work, thereby
treating drafting as an extension of the creative act of writing, rather than
as something whic 1 is carried out on work already completed.
Free writing
The most fundamental technique that I have derived from writers’
workshops is the 1 se of free writing, whereby the students write for a
limited amount of ime without stopping (Yates, 1999: 105-106). I first
came across free xx riting in the workshop situation at the monthly Writing
Days run by Peter Sansom at the Poetry Business in Huddersfield which I
started to attend in the early 1990s and which I now attend as a tutor.
Both Peter Sansom and I use the technique as a ‘warm up’, though in
practice the exerci.e often results in noticeably ‘finished’poems from
workshop participFnts. Once the technique has been used as a warm up,
its principles extend to further exercises, which might make use of
poems by establisl-ed writers, particularly the principle of writing without
stopping, and writing without a clear notion of the outcome. Free writing
is not merely a workshop technique, it is a way of writing, as I will
establish, which is used by all kinds of writers, including novelists. The
technique of free vrriting (sometimes going by other names, such as ‘hot
penning’, ‘automat c writing’ and ‘writing practice’) is also advocated in
handbooks on writing, as a technique available to the individual writer
(Sansom, 1994: 68: Sweeney and Williams, 1997: 9; Goldberg, 1986: 8).
Writing without stopping is in fact the first ‘rule‘of free writing that Peter
Sansom recommends in Writing Poems (Sansom. 1994: 68-69>.(That ’free’
writing should take place according to certain niles, incidentally, is a
paradox worthy of poetry teaching which is coniounded by such
paradoxes, e.g. the necessity of saying a great dcal in a few lines.) The
time limit is important; between five and ten minutes is most effective.
Ten minutes of writing sounds a long time to some students, whereas
five sounds more achievable. A longer time can be seen as more
intimidating; after all, no one can write a poem n only five minutes. In
fact, it is surprising how students actually do write a first draft in five
minutes. The time limit, in fact, is a way of applbring pressure and
removing anxiety, which is the basis of all these ‘rules’.The second rule
is not to think, but to allow the writing to go in the way it chooses; this
is a way of discouraging the student from critici.ing the work during the
process of writing. The third rule is not to rhyme because this slows
down the writing (and can lead to writing where the student uses a word
simply because it happens to rhyme). There are two additional rules. The
first of these is not to write to the edge of the pdge but to write in lines;
I return to this point be1ow.j The final rule is not to worry because, after
all, this is just a warm up exercise and no one ib expecting a complete
poem. Sharing this assumption is another way of removing anxiety.
’When students are more experiencedwith free writing, I suggest writing in lines and
stanzas. (For the sake of avoiding confusion, I do not distinguish between stanzas
and verse paragraphs when working with students in the classroom.)
should write what is important to them, not what they will feel safe with if
they are forced to read aloud what they have written.) For motivated and
able students, free writing provides freedom from the pressure to ‘get it
right’; successful students can all too easily be the ones who are adept at
producing work that will please the teacher. What we want, surely, is for
students to write about what is important to them.
Jumpstartingthe poem
To jumpstart free writing, it is common to provide an opening line or
phrase. This is particularly useful, given that a common problem with
students is often not knowing how to begin a piece of writing. Useful
openings, for example, are ‘I shouldn’t say this but’, ‘Just at that moment’
and ’This time last year’. One that works particularly well is ‘I remember’
which originated with the artist Joe Brainard, whose autobiographical
book length poem I remember, originally published in 1970, consists of
hundreds of brief entries, each beginning with that phrase (Brainard,
2001). ‘I remember’ can be used as a structuring device as Brainard uses
it; if the student mns out of material, they can simply repeat ‘I remember’
and continue with another memory, as the following poem demonstrates:
IN A RUSH
This poem illustrates how free writing can work the poem seems to
build up to the ending; it is as if the first part of the poem is there to
provide the context for this story, as if the writer discovers what she
wants to write about during the course of the witing.
TERROSIT (Edit 3)
Trust,
Terrosit group,
Began
(estimate) 1892.
Little is known of
hope.
One of the earliest poems I teach with a new class is William Carlos
Williams’ ‘This is Just to Say’ (Williams, 2000: 372). This poem is
particularly successful because it makes writing accessible, demonstrating
how the language of a note can be accommodxed into a poem. Another
poem I use early on, that is equally effective, is Frank O’Hara’s ‘Les
Etiquettes Jaunes’ which demonstrates how to write a poem addressing
something from the natural world (O‘Hara, 1 9 5 : 21).’ After reading the
Williams poem, students write a ‘sorry’ poem, real’ or fictive, addressed
to a particular person or group of people, and after reading the O’Hara
poem, students write a poem addressing a living thing. At some point, I
will spend a few minutes discussing with students the ways in which the
writers use line breaks. Williams, for example. uses lines to delineate
units of meaning; each line ends where the speaker would pause. In the
O’Hara poem, on the other hand, line breaks effectively interrupt syntax
and provide a surprising new emphasis as in: As if there was no / such
thing as integrity’ where, in suggesting a pause where there would not
normally be a pause if the lines were spoken. O’Hara adds to the mock-
seriousness of the piece (O’Hara, 1995: 21).
4Kenneth Koch advocates using the poems by O’Hara and Williams that I refer t o here
in Rose, Where Did You Get That Red? (Koch, 1973).
Another useful exurcise which also teaches the potential of line breaks
and stanza breaks is to give the students copies of a poem which has
been typed up as 3 piece of prose, and get them, working in small
groups, to put in the line and stanza breaks. There are no marks for
getting this ‘right’.The important thing is for students to take ownership
and be able to discuss why they prefer certain line breaks to others. Brief
sessions like this bring to light the possibilities of line breaks and equip
students to make the choices they need to make when they write.
Wdliam Kerley’s poem illustrates the way in which the approach I have
described has equipped h m to make hghly individual choices about
where to break the lines. The line breaks counterpoint the rhythm of the
syntax, providing ;I sense of awkwardness, for example, in breakmg the
line after the connectives ‘of and ‘when’,effectively highlighting the
tension between the official-sounding tone and the element of the sinister
conveyed by the undercurrent of fear. In other words, the form of the
poem matches the content. William, in fact, may not have described the
effect of the poem in these terms; it is notoriously difficult for a writer to
interpret their owr work, as Robert Sheppard has argued (Sheppard, 2002:
13-14). To say all this is not to invalidate William Kerley’s achievement or
imply that the decisions he made about form were not deliberate or
conscious: ‘TERROST ( E l t 3)‘ demonstrates an undeniable confidence in
its apparently anarchic use of form to acheve a particular effect.
Sitting
pancaked aqainst the ground
waits
like a mine
teeth bared
gurgling
5pace does not allow me t o discuss the use of established forms here. I have dealt
with this issue in Jumpstart Poetry in the Secondary School (Yates, 1999).
An eye darts
from side to side
nervously
Munch!
The short lines effectively heighten the dramatic nature of the account.
The last one-line stanza, after the use of the three triplets, accentuates
the sudden drama and surprise of the meaning and also creates a
sense of immediacy. The following poem is more leisurely, befitting its
subject:
TOAD
I have no warts.
Whatyou see
is the overflow of my feelings,
popping through my skin.
had written their poems) then I asked the students to write about their
animal. This is Ruth Yates’ first draft:
The most obvious changes made for the final draft are to the choice of
words: ‘plash’becomes ‘plosh’and .with a blink is added. Changes to
the line breaks art- particularly significant, especially in the third version,
where line breaks interrupt the flow of the syntax, in ‘pond’s/ edge’ and
‘cross / purposes’ as if to accentuate the toad’s hestitancy and
awkwardness. The final draft, however, abandons this approach, leaves
the words to take care of themselves, and uses the line breaks more
successfully to accentuate the suddenness of the jump, so that ‘with a
blink’ could refer ro the observer or to the toad itself. The line ‘with a
blink‘ also creates a pause between the two lines it interrupts; it enacts
the time it takes for the toad to ht the water. It can be seen that a
comparison between the final draft and the earlier drafts illustrates how
drafting can invigorate a poem and add to its freshness.
Conclusion
It is important that we provide students with ways of working derived
from established writers, including the techniques used in writers’
workshops, so that they are equipped to write JS well as they are able.
Free writing is not only a successful writing method used by established
writers, it is also a technique which provides the pressure of a challenge
without anxiety. The students’ poems that I ha\-e discussed in this paper
illustrate the potential of free writing and the m ay in which students can
gain a degree of authority, as writers, by the careful use of form, with
specific reference to line breaks. The fact that all these poems were
written as improvisations, and revised in the same spirit, illustrates the
way in whch students can utilise the practices of established writers,
combining techniques of improvisation and formal constraint in order to
produce successful poems.
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