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Irshadullah Rahimi
Prof. Church
ENG 1010-84
23 April 2020
Unbeknownst to many, the democracy we know of today is deeply rooted to the struggles
and efforts of the early black Americans. Despite being denied the equality promised to all, the
blacks fervently fought for their own struggles, pving way for every other rights struggle such as
women’s and gay rights. Nikole-Hannah Jones (2019), a black American journalist, gives light to
how the black Americans are truly America’s unsung heroes of democracy in her article entitled
The first enslavement of Africans in the United States can be traced back to over 400
years ago when they were purchased and taken to Jamestown. These salves became the pioneers
to slavery that saw millions of Africans chained and transported to become slaves of the
mainly through cotton, which ignited the industrial revolution. For without these African slaves,
the Capitol, the White House and even products we know of would become unknown to most of
the world.
Years have passed since the first African slaves stepped foot in America, but Thomas
Jefferson refused to recognize them as human beings. He created a system of laws that ensured
cruelty to the blacks. Rather than being treated equally, they were considered as property and get
treated like commodities to get sold, mortgaged, gifted, or even discarded at will. A slave camp
by the name Monticello was also established where 130 people were enslaved.
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Over the years, black people have consistently fought for their freedom and equality.
During the late 19th century, a wave of systematic violence against blacks broke out and Isaac
Woodard, a soldier who served in the army, suffered from white violence. This was an
aftershock of the Civil War where white Americans were upset that black existence was a painful
language, naming or dressing, in order to express and create an identity for themselves. Black
American Culture is rooted to Africa, but is not African. It is its own unique culture by people
Despite the injustices suffered by the blacks, they made immense progress and brought
America to where it stands today. Slavery may have ravished black Americans for more than two
and a half centuries, but African Americans have made astonishing progress in America, not only
for themselves, but for every American citizen regardless of their race.
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ESSAY #2:
of historical events in the United States from the 17th century up to the present. Nikole Hannah-
Jones discusses the discrimination and hatred towards African Americans. Hannah-Jones
narrates her father’s real-life encounters as a black American who served in the army to gain
recognition as an American. Regardless of his efforts to gain recognition, he suffered like most
of African Americans and never got ahead in life. The author utilizes several elements that
impacted not only the article, but the readers as well. The success of her narrative is influenced
by factors such as technique and the use of numerous writing elements such as genre, allusion,
The article documents some of the most frustrating challenges African Americans faced
in the 17th century in the fight for a democratic country. Moreover, the author documents her
own life as a black American, including the struggles she is currently facing. Jones reiterates that
her father was born in Mississippi, a state which was densely populated by African Americans,
problems due to their race and color. Similarly, her grandmother was denied the right to vote or
use the public library just like all the other African Americans in the country. For this reason, her
grandmother and thousands of other African Americans left the southern part of America,
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moving to the north with high hopes of living a better life. However, even with the abolishment
of the international slave trade, the challenge they facced did not end here.
Hannah-Jones has incorporated many writing elements to catch the attention and educate
her readers. From the article, it can be observed that she utilizes a rhetorical element to illustrate
the challenges in fighting for black equality. Her persuasiveness, backed up by facts and real life
experiences, entails the audience to engage and immerse themselves in the composition.
The tone is another vital writing element utilized by Hannah-Jones in documenting the
challenges of African Americans. The author’s tone suggests that the African Americans have
endured severe challenges since the early period of slave trade to the current racial
The tone is another vital writing element utilized by the author in documenting the
challenges of African Americans. Her persuasive tone suggests that the African Americans have
endured severe challenges since the early period of slave trade to the current racial
discrimination in the country. She presents her ideas in a clear and concise way that does not, in
any way, condemn the readers of their own opinion. Instead, she backs her central idea with facts
One of the most essential elements in the article is its background. It documents the
challenges African Americans have faced before and after enslavement. Hannah-Jones presents
the actual difficulties of the black race during enslavement with facts backed up by history. She
also used stories from her family born in two different generations who have suffered from racial
discrimination. This, along with the factual information, makes her claim stronger and allows her
to educate and inform the readers of the message she intends to impart to them.
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The article does educate people from different regions and races about the suffering of
struggles as blacks living in America. Most importantly, the article gives recognition to the black
American people who remain unacknowledged despite fighting for the democracy we know of
today. For without them, democracy wouldn’t even look and feel like democracy.
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Works Cited
Hannah-jones, Nikole. “America Wasn't a Democracy, Until Black Americans Made It One.”
The New York Times. The New York Times, August 14, 2019.
https://www.nytimes.com/interactive/2019/08/14/magazine/black-history-american-
democracy.html?
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What were the weakest aspects of this essay’s last draft before revision? How did you
decide what to change? Specifically, what aspects and/or passages did you change? How
did you go about making the changes? Where will your readers find a clear example of the
changes you made? How did each significant change affect the essay? What have you
learned in doing these deep revisions? What grade family should the essay now attain, and
why?
I believe that the initial essay that was submitted was weak in terms of grammar and
sentence constructions. Some of the sentences were obscurely unrelated to each other. Hence,
giving the readers a vague understanding of the composition. It was easy to revise based on the
comments by the professor which helped in deciding what needs to be changed. One obvious
change I made was the opening paragraph. I decided to provide a summary on the article rather
By making each change, I believe that my essay is now clear, concise, and easy to
understand. Paragraphs are now connected to each other and for that reason, everything adds up
to a good conclusion. I have learned that revising does not mean my initial output was not good
enough. Rather, I take this as an opportunity to learn and challenge myself to do better. With
that, I think I must get an A after this revision as it really is different from my initial submission.
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