Report: Jata Shankar

Jata Shankar
by Aaditya Prakash

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Jata Shankar
PERSONAL DATA PROTECTION BILL, 2019
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Information has become the most important asset in the 21st century. This is
obvious from the way that ve of the most signi cant organization on the
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planet, in particular Amazon, Google, Microsoft, Facebook, and Apple have a
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place with the information factor. With the advancement in technology, Data
has given an enormous power in the hands of companies. However, with no
clearly de ned regulations and policies, companies are misusing this personal
data to gain insights without the consent of the individual. The mishandling and
sharing of this personal information by digital-savvy companies to third parties
should be regulated. Hence, comes the need for a clearly de ned data
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protection bill with the sole purpose of governing the collection, processing,
and storage of personal data of citizens by the companies.
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Before deep-diving into the data protection bill, let us understand what exactly
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personal data is. Personal data can be de ned as any information that can be
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used to identify an individual. It includes name, home address, passwords,
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email address, etc. Everyone has a privilege to ensure the privacy of his or her
personal information.

How is personal data regulated currently in India?

The usage, processing, and storage of personal data by organizations is
governed by the Information Technology Rules, 2011, under the IT act, 2000.
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The Act holds the companies liable, which are processing the data, in case of
any misuse or negligence in maintaining the security standards while handling
the personal data.

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Was there a need for Personal Data Protection Bill?

Although the rules in the IT Act, 2000, were acceptable in the attempt of data
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protection while they were introduced, the advancement in technology and
increased usage of data has proved its inadequacies and limitations. For case
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61 in point, the act does not apply to the government and a fraction of the
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provisions can be outweighed by a simple contract.
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As we can recall the case of Cambridge Analytica, a British political counseling
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rm that consolidated misappropriation of computerized resources, data
mining, data nancier, and data examination with vital correspondence during
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the referendum. At the time of the US election, there was a data breach
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whereby Cambridge Analytica leaked and misused a huge number of Facebook
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client’s very own information without assent. It is the biggest known data
breach in the history of Facebook. Hence, there was a need for a regulated
62 personal data protection bill.

Introduction of Personal Data Protection Bill

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The Personal Data Protection Bill was brought in Parliament because of the
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information protection issues in India, which have been getting more noticeable
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in recent years. The beginning of the bill lies in the milestone “Puttaswamy v
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India”. judgment, given on August 24, 2017. Considering Article 21 of the
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Constitution, right to life and personal liberty, the Supreme Court held that
privacy is a fundamental right and the privacy of personal data and facts is its
vital aspect.
In July 2017, a Committee of Experts, led by Justice B. N. Srikrishna, was set up
to examine different issues identi ed with information security in India. The
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Committee presented its report, alongside a Draft Personal Data Protection

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Bill, to the Ministry of Electronics and Information Technology in July 2018. The
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Minister of Electronics and Information Technology, Mr. Ravi Shankar Prasad,

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presented The Personal Data Protection Bill, 2019 in Lok Sabha, on December
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66 11, 2019. The main purpose of this Bill is to provide protection of personal data
of the general public and to build up a Data Protection Authority, a body that
will have signi cant power to monitor and enforce the provision of the data
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61 protection bill. A bill of personal data protection was drafted to protect an
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individual’s data and preventive missuses. The bill governs the collection,
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processing, and storage of one’s personal data. The bill de ned an individual,
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whose data is being processed, as a data principal and an entity or organization
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processing this data as data duciary.
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Key aspects of the bill are-
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• According to this bill, Data has been classi ed into three categories-
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• Personal data – It includes Data, which gives the basic information of
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an individual through which he/she can be identi ed. It includes
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name, passwords, identi cation number, location data, mental,
cultural, social identity, telephone, appearance, number plate,
customer number, and address.
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• Sensitive personal data – It includes data that needs to be stored
within India but can be transferred outside India for processing after
the explicit consent of the user and the Data Protection Authority’s
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64 permission. This includes data relating to sexual orientation,
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nancial data, health data religious or political beliefs, and
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transgender status. Notably, passwords have been removed from the
de nition.
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• Critical personal data – It includes data that can be stored only in
India. It is non-transferable data and organizations are required to
store and process such data within the country’s borders.
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• The Bill administers the processing of individual data by (i) government,
66 (ii) organizations incorporated in India, and (iii) foreign companies
managing individual information of people in India.
• It provides Data Fiduciary to an individual so that any personal
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61 information can be processed by their consent only.
• It provides certain rights to an individual, which includes: checking
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whether their data has been processed, pursuing veri cation and
correction of incomplete, inaccurate personal data, illegal means of
using data, right to be forgotten, restricting continuous disclosure of
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their personal data by a duciary if it is no longer necessary or consent is
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withdrawn and transfer of this data to other duciary.
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The bill imposed certain restrictions as well on dealing out with personal data.
For example, individual information can be prepared distinctly for an explicit,
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clear, and legitimate reason. Information can be used only when it is necessary,
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notice should be given to a person for processing their data and data should be
deleted at the end of processing.
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Exemptions from the bill & Non Compliance Penalties
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The processing of personal data of an individual is exempt in following
situations by the Central Government such as security of the state, upliftment
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of the state welfare, sovereignty and integrity of India and friendly relations
67 with outside India. There is an exemption in the processing of the personal data
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for other purposes as well such as investigation, prevention, or trial of any
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offense and reporting. In case of legal proceedings and as a response to
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medical emergencies, the personal data of an individual can be processed
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without their consent.
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65 The bill established a Data Protection Authority to ensure compliance with the
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provisions of the bill. The data protection authority will nd a way to secure the

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interests of people, prevent misuse of individual information, and guarantee

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66 consistency with the Bill and advance mindfulness about information
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insurance. The Authority will consist of 7 members including a chairperson
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having atleast 10 years of experience in the eld of data security and data
61 privacy. A complaint can be led to the Authority if a person is not satis ed
with the compensation provided for the unfair treatment by the data duciary.
The Authority will also provide compensation and impose penalties for the
violation of the personal data protection bill. In case of any non-compliance, an
organization is subject to be punishable with a ne of Rs 15 crore or 4% of
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global turnover. The person can even appeal against the orders of the Authority
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to an Appellate Tribunal and can le an appeal against the order of the Tribunal
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at the Supreme Court.

Conclusion
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The nal Bill has numerous changes from the draft bill proposed by the
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committee led by Justice BN Srikrishna. The new bill has removed many
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safeguards from the draft bill, which were presented by the committee. In
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addition, the bill has added social media intermediaries as a new class of data
68 duciaries and has lifted the limitations on the processing of personal data by
the government, with an expanded scope of exemptions for the government.
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The Personal Data Protection Bill, 2019 plans to secure the protection of people
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as for their own information and administers the connection among people and
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substances handling their own information. It, at the same time endeavor, to
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make a strong advanced economy by guaranteeing development through
computerized administration.

65 References

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1. https://www.prsindia.org/billtrack/personal-data-protection-bill-2019
66 2. https://www.medianama.com/2019/12/223-key-aspects-personal-data-
protection-bill-2019/
3. http://prsindia.org/sites/default/ les/bill_ les/Personal%20Data%20Pr
61 otection%20Bill%2C%202019.pdf
4. https://www.pwc.in/consulting/cyber-security/data-privacy/personal-
data-protection-bill-2019-what-you-need-to-know.html
5. http://prsindia.org/node/843845/chapters-at-a-glance
6. https://www.businesstoday.in/current/policy/personal-data-protection-
bill-2019-central-government-power-may-undermine-privacy-of-
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citizens-people/story/392186.html
7. https://blog.ipleaders.in/personal-data-protection-
bill/#Restrictions_On_Transfer_of_Data_Outside_India
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15. computerized → electronic, digital Word Choice Engagement

16. As we can recall the case of Incomplete Sentences Correctness

Cambridge Analytica, a British
political counseling rm that
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mining, data nancier, and data
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correspondence during the

referendum.
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6447. In case of legal proceedings and as a Intricate Text Clarity

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