Report: Jata Shankar

Jata Shankar
by Aaditya Prakash

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Writing Issues
45 Correctness
18 Determiner use (a/an/the/this, etc.)
6 Punctuation in compound/complex
sentences
2 Text inconsistencies
1 Comma misuse within clauses
3 Faulty subject-verb agreement
4 Misspelled words
4 Improper formatting
1 Misuse of semicolons, quotation marks, etc.
1 Confused words
1 Misplaced words or phrases
1 Incomplete sentences
1 Incorrect phrasing
2 Incorrect verb forms

9 Delivery
9 Inappropriate colloquialisms

22 Clarity
3 Wordy sentences
14 Passive voice misuse
5 Intricate text

10 Engagement
9 Word choice
1 Monotonous sentences

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Jata Shankar

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When we talk about something personal in general sense, it always means that
we wish to keep the thought, idea, thing or talk within ourselves. If we talk
about a child in school days, to share a silly secret which he thinks as personal;
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children take a pinky promise from the other person. Isn’t that pinky promise
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said as something asked in consent of sharing the personal talk? Now if a child
can be so conscious about sharing a silly secret with a friend and takes a
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promise as a con rmation, then the adults de nitely think multiple times
before sharing any data.
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There is a widespread adoption of digital technologies across India. And in
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sudden struck of pandemic COVID-19, entire world relies on digital
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technologies. Where there is digitalisation there is a protection policy in sharing
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commercial or personal data.
Meaning of Personal Data: any piece of information from which inference can
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be drawn to identify a person.
For privacy policies, the government of India has introduced a new bill for the
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protection of data of Indian citizens. The Personal Data Protection Bill, 2019
was introduced in Lok Sabha by the Minister of Electronics and Information
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Technology, Mr Ravi Shankar Prasad, on December 11, 2019. The Bill seeks to
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provide for protection of personal data of individuals, and establishes a Data
Protection Authority for the same.
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There was a famous case law and a landmark verdict to be remembered for the
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Right to Privacy (Justice K.S.Puttaswamy and Anr. Vs Union of India and ors). A
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landmark judgement of the Supreme Court of India which holds that the right to
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89 privacy is protected as a fundamental constitutional right under Articles 14,19
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and 21 of Constitution of India. The nine-judge bench of J.S.Khehar ,
J.Chelameswar, S.A.Bobde, R.K.Agrawal, R.F.Nariman, A.M.Sapre,
Dr.D.Y.Chandrachud, S.K.Kaul and S.A.Nazeer unanimously held that the “right
to privacy is protected as an intrinsic part of the right to life and personal

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liberty under Article 21 and as a part of the freedoms guaranteed by Part III of
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the Constitution”. It explicitly overrules previous judgements of the Supreme
Court in Kharak Singh vs State of UP and M.P.Sharma vs Union of India, which
had held that there is no fundamental right to privacy under the Indian
Constitution.

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Applicability: The Bill governs the processing of personal data by: (i)
government (ii) companies incorporated in India, and (iii) foreign companies
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dealing with personal data of individuals in India. Personal data is data which
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pertains to characteristics, traits or attributes of identity, which can be used to
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identify an individual. The Bill categorises certain personal data as sensitive
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personal data. This includes nancial data, biometric data, caste, religious or
political beliefs, or any other category of data speci ed by the government, in
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87 consultation with the Authority and the concerned sectorial regulator.
Give consent to what feels right
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Give no consent to what infringes your right

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Isn’t it thoughtful, if our actions follow the same as the quote says above? If a
person behaves mature in times of emergencies, then he is found eligible to
tackle a situation calmly.
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Relating it to sharing our data with someone, there is always a small amount of
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89 care we need to focus on. Especially when sharing personal data. The
government of our country has taken the best measure to protect the data of
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citizens y passing a bill. The only objective of the bill is to protect the personal
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data and privacy of Indian Citizens in digital world.
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To understand the Bill, we need to understand why it was kind of important to
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pass the bill? We create immense data and data is something which ows like
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water. Be it in personal or in commercial world. Advertisements have also
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become a form to keep consumers / watchers updated about the protection of
their data and guidelines to combat with frauds. The advertisement of RBI
passes the same message to the audience.
The Personal Data Protection Bill, 2020 has classi ed data into different kinds.
They are:
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1. Personal Data b. Non Personal Data c. Sensitive Data
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Personal Data can be explained as, data of a person which includes not so
sensitive information but some general information such as, Name, Address,
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Blood Group, Quali cation, etc.
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Non Personal Data can be termed as some data which is of some unanimous
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person or of some unknown nature.
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Sensitive Data is the data which talks about a nancial, health or biometric
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information of some person. A type of data which is usually shared only on
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privacy policies and for some genuine purpose. (RBI guidelines)

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The Bill has created a sense of relief in the minds of people living in India as
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well as outside India. The former group of multiples companies which deals
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with Indian Companies earlier hesitated when sharing some data. But now, the
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Bill has strike off the burden of proof from the Foreign Companies worry list. It
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89 is rst time in India that a Bill is passed for protecting the data. Wherein, the
other countries had existing policies for the data protection of their
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citizens. Therefore, India’s involvements in global norms are now at larger level
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and in par with the other countries. It deals with the avour of what is expected
from citizens!
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Certain security parameters have assured the crowd about the objective of the
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Bill. Various security provisions comply for the kinds of data. Non Personal
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Data shows lenient provisions. On the other side, the Sensitive Data needs rigid
norms. And liberal rules for Personal Data.
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The two important de nitions that this Bill clari es from the outset are Data
and Data duciary. Data means and includes a representation of information,
facts, concepts, opinions, or instructions in a manner suitable for
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communication, interpretation, or processing by humans or by automated
means. Data Fiduciary means any person who alone or in conjunction with
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others determines the purpose and means of personal data.
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The Bill also says that a data duciary must take all steps to ensure that
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personal data that is processed is complete, accurate, not misleading ,
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updated and must have some regard to the purpose for which it is processed in
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the rst place. If the collected data is shared with a third party or to be shared
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87 for further processing, that has to be disclosed to the individual whose data is
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collected. The Data Fiduciary must carry out periodic reviews to check whether
98 they need data or certain parts for future use. In case, some data is not
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required then it must be deleted as per guidelines and conveyed to the
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individual. This also helps when you deal with foreign countries and there is
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good record of data maintained. It also avoids dispute and maintain friendly
relations.
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Penalty: If non-sensitive personal data safeguard terms are violated, then the
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89 penalty will be up to Rs.5 crore or 2% of annual turnover, whichever is more. If
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anyone collecting data is found violating the safeguards for sensitive personal
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data which includes transfer of personal data outside the borders of India and
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processing a child’s personal data without speci c consent, will be liable for a
penalty of up to Rs.15 crore or 4% of total worldwide turnover, whichever is

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more.

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The central government can exempt any of its agencies from the provisions of
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Act. i.) In interest of security of state, public order , sovereignty and integrity of
India and
friendly relations with foreign states, and ii) for preventing incitement to
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commission of any cognisable offence (i.e. arrest without warrant). Processing
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102 of personal data is also exempted from provisions of Bill for certain other
purposes such as prevention, investigation, or prosecution of any offence or
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personal, domestic or journalistic purpose.
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There is also a wing of administrative wing with Data Protection Authority. An
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authority which deals with the grievances and breach complains. It helps
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combating fake news, online cyber-crimes, social intermediaries, mob lynching
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processing must be speci c, clear, and lawful; purpose with certain security
98 safeguards.

To justify the title, BETTER A FRIENDLY REFUSAL THAN AN UNWILLING

CONSENT, says that a person shall always take a wise step in sharing data with
someone.
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It’s a wake up message and an escape from data frauds.
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1. a general, or the general Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

92 etc.)
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2. Isn’t → Is not Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

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3. the consent Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness
etc.)

4. de nitely Wordy Sentences Clarity

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5. a widespread Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

etc.)

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6. And → Moreover,, Furthermore, Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery
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7. the entire Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness
etc.)

8. digitalisation, Punctuation in Correctness

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9. commercial → nancial, economic Word Choice Engagement

10. be drawn Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

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11. Bill; bill Text Inconsistencies Correctness

12. the protection Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

96 etc.)

8713. individuals, Comma Misuse within Clauses Correctness

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9814. was → were Faulty Subject-Verb Agreement Correctness

15. ors → others Misspelled Words Correctness

16. is protected Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

17. The nine-judge bench of J.S.Khehar , Intricate Text Clarity

J.Chelameswar, S.A.Bobde,
88 R.K.Agrawal, R.F.Nariman,

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A.M.Sapre, Dr.D.Y.Chandrachud,
S.K.Kaul and S.A.Nazeer
92 unanimously held that the “right to
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privacy is protected as an intrinsic
part of the right to life and personal
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of t…

18. J.S.Khehar , Improper Formatting Correctness

9019. Misuse of Semicolons, Quotation Correctness

by:
Marks, etc.

20. data; Data Text Inconsistencies Correctness

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22. certain → speci c Word Choice Engagement

23. This Intricate Text Clarity

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25. your Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

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26. thoughtful, Punctuation in Correctness
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27. Relating it to sharing our data with Misplaced Words or Phrases Correctness
96 someone

8728. on Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

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29. Especially when sharing personal Incomplete Sentences Correctness
98 data.

30. the digital Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

etc.)

31. important → essential Word Choice Engagement

32. the commercial, or a commercial Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

88 etc.)

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33. consumers/watchers Improper Formatting Correctness

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35. so → such Incorrect Phrasing Correctness

36. etc Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

37. Non Personal → Non-Personal Misspelled Words Correctness

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38. be termed Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

39. of Wordy Sentences Clarity

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40. genuine → good, legitimate Word Choice Engagement

41. The Bill has created a sense of relief Intricate Text Clarity
in the minds of people living in India
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91 as well as outside India.

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42. But → However,, Nevertheless, Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

43. strike → struck Incorrect Verb Forms Correctness

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44. the rst Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

etc.)

9645. is passed Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

8746. Wherein, Punctuation in Correctness

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9847. larger → more signi cant, Word Choice Engagement

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etc.)

49. is expected Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

8850. Certain → Speci c Word Choice Engagement

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51. Non Personal → Non-Personal Misspelled Words Correctness

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52. Certain security parameters have Monotonous Sentences Engagement
assured the crowd about the
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99 objective of the Bill. Various security
provisions comply for the kinds of
data. Non Personal Data shows
lenient provisions.

53. the Sensitive Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

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etc.)

54. important → essential, critical, Word Choice Engagement

crucial
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9455. others, Punctuation in Correctness

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56. misleading , Improper Formatting Correctness

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57. is processed Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

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58. If the collected data is shared with a Intricate Text Clarity

third party or to be shared for further
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to the individual whose data is
collected.

59. be shared Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

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60. be disclosed Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

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62. This Intricate Text Clarity

63. you Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

64. , and Punctuation in Correctness

Compound/Complex Sentences

8865. a good Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

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etc.)
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8966. maintain → maintains Faulty Subject-Verb Agreement Correctness

67. are violated Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

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68. is found Passive Voice Misuse Clarity

69. the transfer, or a transfer Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, Correctness

etc.)
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70. personal Wordy Sentences Clarity

10071. i Inappropriate Colloquialisms Delivery

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etc.)

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order ,

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etc.)
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certain → speci c Word Choice Engagement
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81. combating → to combat Incorrect Verb Forms Correctness

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see,
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85. wake up → wake-up
86. the message, or a message
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87. The Personal Data Protection Bill,
2019 was introduced in Lok Sabha by
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the Minister of Electronics and
Information Technology, Mr Ravi
94 Shankar Prasad, on December 11,
2019. The Bill seeks to provide for
protection of personal data of
individuals, and establishes a Data
Protection Authority for the …
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protected as a fundamental
constitutional right under Articles
14,19 and 21 of
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89. The nine-judge bench of J.S.Khehar ,
J.Chelameswar, S.A.Bobde,
R.K.Agrawal, R.F.Nariman,
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A.M.Sapre, Dr.D.Y.Chandrachud,
S.K.Kaul and S.A.Nazeer
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unanimously held that the “right to
97 privacy is protected as an intrinsic
part of the right to life and personal
98 liberty under Article 21 and as a part
of t…
90. It explicitly overrules previous
judgements of the Supreme Court in
Kharak Singh vs State of UP and
M.P.Sharma vs Union of India, which
had held that there is no
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fundamental right to privacy under
the Indian Constitution.
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processing of personal data by: (i)
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incorporated in India, and (iii) foreign
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taken the
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