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15/02/2011
Jonathan Pearmain
The Development
Here are links to the key posts that follow the journey of my stories
development:
Story Analysis:
http://jonathanpearmain.blogspot.com/2011/02/concept-unit-4-
beginning.html
Refining Ideas:
http://jonathanpearmain.blogspot.com/2011/02/development-
zeroing-in.html
Re-thinking:
http://jonathanpearmain.blogspot.com/2011/02/development-
picking-it-all-apart.html
Café Chat:
http://jonathanpearmain.blogspot.com/2011/02/development-cafe-
chat.html
Influence Map:
http://jonathanpearmain.blogspot.com/2011/02/development-
influence-map.html
Beat Outline:
http://jonathanpearmain.blogspot.com/2011/02/development-beat-
outline.html
The Treatment
It is a clear and cold night. San Francisco sits in early March, it’s
misty and damp. The famous ‘Heroes’ Cemetery’ lies at the eastern
end of Golden Gate Park, near the baseball field. Usually the hum of
traffic can be heard from the nearby Lincoln way, but tonight it’s oddly
quiet.
Inside the cemetery however, all is not quiet. A figure slips over the
side wall, landing lightly; a cape on its back making it seems like some
large bat. It flits between the gravestones, making its way towards the
large mausoleum situated at the centre of the cemetery. Emerging into
the light cast by the mausoleum’s interior, Walter Bentley is revealed.
He is thin, limp, his arms and legs overlong, while his back seems unable
to support his overly large head. His face is triangular in shape, a
bulging forehead tapering to an ugly point of a chin. Large thick
spectacles sit at the end of his large, permanently dripping nose,
behind which beady, weak eyes stare in awe. His mouth hangs open,
large uneven teeth filling the gap. His costume is clearly handmade but
is certainly the result of a lot of effort; a large purple lighting flash is
blazoned upon his chest, declaring him to be ‘Lethal Lightning’, his
chosen alias. He checks an old newspaper article that confirms the
burial of ‘Captain Majestico’ in the cemetery along with his renowned
‘Hero Hat’. It also shows an image of the mausoleum’s statue. He looks
slightly unsettled at the size of the structure, as if it dwarfed the image
he held in his mind. However, he musters his courage and enters inside.
Walter shakes himself out of his vision, and the reality of his skinny
form, limp limbs and spotty, unpleasant face becomes all too clear.
Walter on the contrary seems convinced of his success. He takes his first
bold step on the ramp. Suddenly, an unseen trapdoor in the roof opens
and a large bolder drops through. It crashes into the other end of the
ramp, which is revealed to be a cunningly concealed see-saw. The
other end catapults Walter through a conveniently placed hole in the
roof. The see-saw resets itself and the boulder is sent rolling out the
door.
Walter shakes himself out of this vision, and we’re reminded of his
lank, spotty and limp appearance. However, Walter will not be
deterred; full of confidence his takes his first bold step on the ramp.
Suddenly, an unseen trapdoor in the roof opens and a large bolder
drops through. It crashes into the other end of the ramp, which is
revealed to be a cunningly concealed see-saw. The other end
catapults Walter through a conveniently placed hole in the roof. The
see-saw resets itself and the boulder is sent rolling out the door.
The Logline
Wannabe super-villain, Walter Bentley (a.k.a ‘Lethal Lightning) is set on
the stealing the magical ‘Hero Hat’ from the mausoleum of the world’s
greatest super-hero, Captain Majestico. But the ‘Heroes’ Garden’
cemetery offers no easy pickings…
Character Bios
The Over-Ambitious Super-Villain
Sex: Male
Age: 20
Citizenship: USA
Country of Birth: USA
Bio: Walter was born believing he was destined for greatness, born into
a world with far too many pompous, over zealous super-heroes,
spineless sycophants who were essentially glorified boy scouts. Oh yes
then could catch a stray missile when it really mattered, but most of
the time they just helped ladies across the country and cleared debris
off train tracks. And the villains weren’t much better, enthusiastic
practical jokers who thoughts all you needed to be evil was a sinister
laugh and a weak handshake. But Walter was different, disregarding
any sense of morality or ethics, he would be the greatest and evilest
super-villain to have terrorized the USA, and maybe the world!
Unfortunately he had to wait, and the international board of super-
beings refused to give him a permit on two reasons. One, he was under
the required age, twenty-one, secondly, he had no actual
superpowers. Walter, who believed himself to be superior to everyone
else on every single level (was that not a super power in itself?!) was
devastated, and swore vengeance. He made himself a costume and
then swore to do what no one else had ever tempted before, to his
knowledge. Steal the hat of the greatest super-hero that had ever
lived: Captain Majestico. Possession of that wondrous artefact would
make Walter unbeatable. All he had to do was steal it from the
mausoleum dedicated to the hero in the heroes’ cemetery “Heroes’
Gardens”…
The (Deceased) Greatest Super-Hero in the World
Sex: Male
Age: Died age 112
Citizenship: USA
Country of Birth: Italy
Act 1:
The Setup
o Establishes Captain Majestico as a hero and his artefact
the ‘Hero’s Hat’.
o Establishes Walter as a lame villain who poses a threat to
Cpt. Majestico’s safety.
Incident
o Walter finds the mausoleum and the coffin/statue inside,
where the hat is.
o He finds out its guarded by a large array of painful looking
traps and devices.
Act 2:
Pre-Climax Build
o However, Walter will not back down. He tenses, puts on a
brave face and takes his first step.
Climax/Anti-Climax
o Suddenly, an unseen trapdoor in the roof opens and a
large bolder drops through. It crashes into the other end of
the ramp, which is revealed to be a cunningly concealed
see-saw. The other end catapults Walter through a
conveniently placed hole in the roof. The see-saw resets
itself and the boulder is sent rolling out the door.
End
o Recovering on the grass outside, Walter looks around to
see his is surrounded by other crumpled forms dressed in
super-villain garb, for a moment his looks surprised, then
the rolling bolder crushes him to death.