Passive Sentences:

Make the following passive sentences active:

I. When all work is completed, turn the blueprint machine off.

Active I will turn the blueprint machine off when all the work is completed.

II. A link, such as products or specifications, was checked by me.

Active voice: I checked a link, such as products or specifications.
III. The OK button was clicked and the correct link was scrolled down to.
Active voice: I clicked the OK button, and scrolled down to the correct link.
IV. After these duplicate sites were eliminated there were still too many sites to
be looked at.
Active voice: I eliminated the duplicate sites, but there were still too many
sites to be looked at.
V. Profits can be optimized by the manufacturer with the use of improved
materials and the result can be better product value for the customer.
Active voice: Profits that are optimized by the manufacturer with the use of
improved materials can have a result of a better product value for the
customer.
VI. Revise the passive voice sentences in these paragraphs.
Active voice: I revised the passive voice sentences in these paragraphs.
Personal writing of passive voice
1. Research on article for Business Management is completed.
Active voice:
I have completed research on article for business Management.
2. The proposal is rejected due to many issues by manager.
 Active voice:
Manager rejected proposal due to many issues.
3. All the extra information is removed from the document.
Active voice:
Editor removed all the extra information from document.
Parallel Structure
2. Revise the following sentences to make their coordinate elements parallel.

Faulty: It serves the purpose of pulling the sheet off the coil and to straighten or
guide the sheet through the rest of the machine.

Parallel: It serves the purpose of pulling, straightening or guiding the sheet off the
coil through the rest of machine.

Faulty: The main uses of the data are to supply estimates of the workforce and
estimating unemployment.

Parallel: The main use of the data is to supply estimate of workforce and
unemployment.

Faulty: There were clear headings to each section, some links for navigating
around the site, and it provided a glossary of terms.

Parallel: There were clear headings to each section, some links for navigating
around the site which provides glossary terms.
Faulty: During the internship I was responsible for merchandising, creating floor
plans, and to train new employees.
Parallel: During internship I was responsible for merchandising, creating floor
plans and training new employees.

Faulty: Along with a case, the laptop package includes 18 feet of top-quality UGA
cable, a surge protector with circuit checker, and there is also an extra battery.

Parallel: Along with a case, the laptop package includes 18 feet of top-quality
UGA cable, a surge protector with circuit checker, and extra battery

Use of There Are

5. Eliminate there are, or any related form, from the following sentences.

Faulty: There are several methods of research that I will use.

Correct: I would use several methods of research.
Faulty: There are slowness and inefficiency in the data processing and information
retrieval.
Correct: some slowness and inefficiency in the data processing and information
retrieval.
Faulty: There is a need for some XML code to be learned by me.

Correct: I need to learn some XML code.

Faulty: There is a reliance on business to provide product information on the Web.

Correct: Providing the product information on the web is the reliance of business.
Faulty: There is the necessity to modify packaging methods so that there can be
fewer contaminants released into the environment.

Correct: Modifying packing methods is necessary so that there can be fewer

contaminants released into environment.
Personal writing
1) There are several methods which I will use to solve the problem of electricity.
Correct
I will use several methods to solve electricity problem.
2) There are many other benefits in CPEC for both counties (Pakistan and
China).
Correct
CPEC have many other benefits for both counties (Pakistan and China).
3) There are many problems which exists if we improving product quality.
Correct
if we improving product quality, we face a lot of problems.

Nominalization
Correct the nominalizations in the following sentences.

Faulty: Insertion of the image into the document occurs when you click OK.

Correct: By clicking OK image is inserted in the document.

Faulty: Specification of the file as a Word document was necessary to make the
conversion of the file from text to Word.
Correct: To specify a file as a word document was necessary to convert file from
text to word.

Faulty: The manipulation of the layout in order to cause the transformation of it

into film is the process of color separation.

Correct: To transform the manipulated layout into the flim is the process of color
separation.

Faulty: The use of my two keywords resulted in the best results for me.

Correct: The use of my two keywords gives best result for me.

Faulty: The conversion of the screen captures to JPEGs was easy to perform.

Correct: Screen captures are easy to convert into JPEGS.

Use of You
Correct the use of you in the following sentences.

Faulty: To judge the site’s accuracy I read the tutorial and evaluated the lessons.
This is where you look for your clear technical explanations and your computer
code examples.
Correct: To judge the site’s accuracy I read the tutorial and evaluated the lessons.
This is where one look for clear technical explanation and computer code
examples.
Faulty: This evaluation is different than the change from your old remote control
to
the new laser ones.
Correct: This evaluation is different than the change from old remote control to
the new laser ones.
Faulty: Two methods exist to enhance fiber performance. In the first you orient
the
fibers. The second is the alkali process.
Correct: Two methods exist to enhance fiber performance. In the first orientation
of fiber is done and the second is the alkali process.
Personal writing
i. You can promote our product by two process of advertisement.
Correct
We can promote our product by two process of advertisement.
ii. You all are thinking for taking admission in any university of Pakistan
Correct
Everyone is thinking to take admission in any university of
Pakistan.
Sexist Language
Correct the sexist language in the following sentences.

Faulty: Each presenter must bring his own laptop.

Correct: Each presenter must bring their own laptop. OR
Every presenter must bring their own laptop.
Faulty: Every secretary will hand in her timecard on Friday.
Correct: Every secretary will hand in their timecard on Friday.
Faulty: If he understands the process, the machinist can improve production.
Correct: if they understand the process, the machinist can improve production.
Faulty: Details were very good up to a point, but then the author seemed to lose
her
focus.
Correct: Details were very good up to a point, but then the author seemed to lose
focus.
Faulty: I am not sure who Dr. Jones is, but I am sure he is a good doctor.
Correct: I am not sure who Dr. Jones is, but I am sure he/she is a good doctor.

Choppiness
Eliminate the choppiness in the following sentences.
Faulty: XYZ has introduced an LCD monitor. The monitor is 17 inches. The
monitor
has a Web camera. Web conferencing applications can use the Web camera.
Correct: XYZ has introduced a 17 inches LCD monitor with web camera and
web conferencing application which use web camera.
Faulty: Numerical control exists in two forms. CNC is one form. CNC is
Computer
Navigated Control. DNC is Distributed Numerical Control.
Correct: Numerical control exists in two forms CNC (Computer Navigated
Control) and DNC (Distributed Numerical Control).
Faulty: On-line registration is frustrating. It should make it faster to register. The
words on the screen are not self-explanatory. Screen notices say things like “illegal
command.” Retracing a path to a screen is difficult.
Correct: On-line registration is frustrating. It should make it faster to register. The
words on the screen are not self-explanatory. Screen notices say things like “illegal
command.” Retracing a path to a screen is difficult.

Wordiness
Revise the following sentences, removing unnecessary words.

Faulty: Due to the fact that we have two computer platforms connected together,
we must pay attention to basic fundamentals when we send a document such as an
e-mail attachment.

Correct: we have two computer platforms so we must pay attention when we

send a document.

Faulty: This project will be presented in Web format with links to the resource
sites as well as other links that are associated with the sites and links that are
associated with the topic of researching a report.

Correct: This project will be presented in Web format with links of resourcing
sites that are associated with researching a report.
Faulty: In-fact many sites are available on the Web where the viewer can have
the actual experience of purchasing equipment, new and used, from the site.

Correct: In-fact many sites are available on the Web for viewers for purchasing
new and old equipment.

Faulty: In the printing business there are two main ways of printing. The first is
by using offset and the second is by using flexography.

Correct: The printing business use offset and flexography methods for printing.

Personal writing mistakes

CPEC is very important project for China as well as Pakistan. Most of the
Pakistani problems will be solved through this project. The most important and
prominent problem of Pakistan is Electricity crisis in Pakistan and through this
project all the energy crisis is going to end because china signed the energy project
whose purpose is to end the energy crisis from Pakistan. The second and the most
important factor is the reduction in oil bills which have a leading effect on Pakistan
economy.
Correct:
CPEC is an important mega project for both counties it gives a lot of benefits and
solve a lot of problems on both ends. This mega project solves electricity problem
the main problem of Pakistan.

Modifiers
Correct the misplaced modifiers in the following sentences.
Faulty: ADA noted that VCLDs reduced energy endurance without carbohydrate
supplementation.

Correct: ADA noted that without carbohydrates supplementation the VCLDs

reduces energy endurance.

Faulty: Three topic areas related to printing were formulated to determine Web
feasibility.
Correct: To determine web feasibility three topic areas related to printing were
formulated.
Faulty: Although EPA legislation contains strong support, it cannot make up for
the lack of information in the two other areas for oil field service engineers.

Correct: Although EPA legislation contains strong support for oil field service
engineers, it cannot make up for the lack of information in the two other areas.
Faulty: Technology must continue to improve in order to fully benefit
economically
in the recovery and preparation processes.
Correct: Technology must continue to improve in the recovery and preparation
processes in order to fully benefit economically.

Run-On Sentences

Correct the following run-on sentences

Faulty: Biology is not the only field of science that nanotechnology will permeate
this revolution can quite possibly influence all sciences and most likely create
more.
Correct: Biology is not the only field of science that nanotechnology will
permeate.
This revolution can quite possibly influence all sciences and most likely create
more.
Faulty: Nonpositive displacement pumps produce a continuous flow because of
this
design, there is no positive internal seal against leakage.

Correct: Nonpositive displacement pumps produce a continuous flow; because of

this design, there is no positive internal seal against leakage.
Faulty: Offset is also known as offset lithography or litho printing the offset
process
uses a flat metal plate with a smooth printing surface that is not raised or engraved.

Correct: Offset is also known as offset lithography or litho printing. The offset
process uses a flat metal plate with a smooth printing surface; that is not raised or
engraved.
Faulty: The countries that import OCC at the highest rates often produce
corrugated
board of 100 percent recycled fibers due to the lessened performance of bogus
board, a dilemma may be created.

Correct: The countries that import OCC at the highest rates, often produce
corrugated board of 100 percent recycled fibers. Due to the lessened performance
of bogus board, a dilemma may be created.
Sentence Fragments

Correct the following sentence fragments:

Faulty: The National Nanotechnology Initiative 247 million dollars in federal

funding 1999.
Correct: The National Nanotechnology Initiative cost 247 million dollars in
federal funding 1999.

Faulty: The fourth aspect of the quality control function making adjustments to
the
process, in order to bring specifications into line.

Correct: The fourth aspect of the quality control function is making adjustments to
the process, in order to bring specifications into line.

Faulty: Thickness availability of Celotex from 1/20 to 21/40.

Correct: Thickness availability of Celotex tablets is from 1/20 to 21/40.

Faulty: Through orientation and the alkali process secondary fiber performance
Enhanced to levels above current performance.

Correct: Through orientation and the alkali process, secondary fiber performance
is enhanced to levels above current performance.
Faulty: While cost savings initiatives and quality have become critical for
businesses to remain competitive today.
Correct: Cost savings initiatives and quality have become critically important for
businesses to remain competitive today.
Punctuation
Comma
1 As shown in the table. The new products will give a profit of millions of
dollars.
Correct
As shown in the table, the new products give us the profit of millions of
dollars.
2 Pakistan China and Iran get most benefit from CPEC.
Correct
Pakistan, China, Iran will get most benefit from CPEC.
3 Installing a juice shop in a company was a fine idea, there are many other
juice shops inside company.
Correct
Installing a juice shop in a compact was a fine idea, but there are many other
juice shops inside company.
Apostrophes
1 Cover all the machines parts.
Correct.
Cover all the machine’s parts.
2 I will use this method to solve the problem.
Correct
I’ll use this method to solve the problem.

Parenthesis
1 Comsats University Islamabad CUI is one of best university in pakistan.
Correct

Comsats University islamabad (CUI) is one of best university in pakistan.

2 This hard drive 20GB, 5400 rpm Ultra ATA/66 can handle all of our current and
future storage needs.
Correct
This hard drive (20GB, 5400 rpm Ultra ATA/66) can handle all of our current and
future storage needs. Correction from personal writings
Arrange Sentences by Level

Correct the following paragraph

cPEC is very important project for China as well as Pakistan most of the Pakistani problems will
be solved through this project the most important and prominent problem of Pakistan is
Electricity crisis in Pakistan and through this project all the energy crisis is going to end because
china signed the energy project whose purpose is to end the energy crisis from Pakistan the
second and the most important factor is the reduction in oil bills which have a leading effect on
Pakistan economy

correct

CPEC is very important project for China as well as Pakistan. Most of the Pakistani problems will
be solved through this project. The most important and prominent problem of Pakistan is
Electricity crisis in Pakistan and through this project all the energy crisis is going to end because
China signed the energy project whose purpose is to end the energy crisis from Pakistan. The
second and the most important factor is the reduction in oil bills which have a leading effect on
Pakistan economy.

Arrange levels of following paragraph:

CPEC stands for China Pakistan Economic Corridor. It is an ongoing development

mega project which aims to connect Gwadar Port of Pakistan to Chain’s north-
western region of Xinjiang, via a network of highways and pipelines. The main
purpose of CPEC is to connect the China and Pakistan with the central Asia,
Middle East. The main purpose of connecting the entire world is to shape out the
entire world’s countries for trade.

Solution

CPEC stands for China Pakistan Economic Corridor (topic sentence).

. It is an ongoing development mega project which aims to connect Gwadar Port of

Pakistan to Chain’s north-western region of Xinjiang, via a network of highways
and pipelines. (level 1)

The main purpose of CPEC is to connect the China and Pakistan with the central
Asia, Middle East. (level 2)

The main purpose of connecting the entire world is to shape out the entire world’s
countries for trade. (level 3)

Choose a Tone for the Reader

Change the tone of following paragraph:

Thank you for your recent proposal on 10 hours work per day in four days. Its
means that instead of working five days in a week we have to work four days in a
week. As working hours for both five days week and four days week are same
because in five days’ work, we work 8 hours per day and 40 hours per week and
same is in the case with four days week we work 10 hours per day in four days
which is equal to 40 hours per week but we rejected your proposal because the four
days week is too short and employees get three weekend holidays. The short week
means the working in 10 hours in a day then no employ is available to work
overtime because they already work 10 hours in a day and burden on workers
increases. As we always need overtime worker so whenever we need overtime
workers then no one is available for work.

Solution

Forceful Tone

The proposal committee and I rejected your proposal of implementing 10 hours

work per day in four days week. You said that the working hours are same for both
weeks but there are a lot of other problems which are the reason for the rejection of
proposal. The main reason for the rejection of your proposal is that this working
week is too short and working time per day for employees is too long which
creates a lot of issues for employees to work. So, I never accept this proposal due
to many problems. So, make an appointment with me for further discussions.

Passive tone

The proposal of changing working week from five days week to four days week
has not been accepted due to a lot of issues. The working hours are same for both
weekend but the four days week is too short for days point of view and according
to employees working 10 hours in a day is too difficult for them. so, this working
weekend also creates a salary problem because some workers are working on
hourly based salary and some of them are on number of days so it’s difficult to
manage them. so, arrange a meeting tomorrow to discuss further issues on this.

Personal Tone

Ali thanks for your proposal of changing the working week for five days week to
four days week. The steering committee understand that it was a good and fine
idea and but on the other hand it also creates a lot of problems, so it is not possible
for us to accept it. We understand that the working hours for both weeks are same
40 hours but it creates a lot of other working and salary issues for employees and
for management also. I know that this is a disappointment but if it possible to
arrange a meeting to discuss issues.

Impersonal Tone

The proposal of changing working week from five days week to four days week
has not been accepted due to a lot of issues. The steering committee face a lot of
working and salary problems if they implement this proposal. The steering
committee will hold its initial meeting on Friday, 25 November at room no 115 to
discuss this.

The End.