In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior.
What do you think are the causes of this?
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What solutions can you suggest?
Since down, student behavior and reaction of school authority to this, was important issue and has
undergone to considerable change. It seems student misbehavior and in consequence, reaction of
society to this social difficulty is multi aspect issue, as a result, specialists have raised different points of
view on that. While some of them believe this misbehavior must be controlled by school authority, there
is also some strong points in favor of more flexible reaction in front of misbehavior of school students.
One of main points, which we should consider in order to find a solution for this social problem, is its
source of that. We can consider various cause and source for this kind of behavior for example:
- It can come backderive from to their childhood and family back ground. Such as lack of (or
excessive) paying attention of parents which cause to bringing up spoiled children.
- It can come back to might originate fotm their cultural back ground and contrast between
cultural behavior of specific child with others which is considers considered by others as a
misbehavior (but actually it is not like that)
- Also physical healthy health condition of each person such as lack of specific elements and
vitamin can cause some aggressive and nervous misbehavior.
- Finally some intelligent persons who are more sensitive to surrounding environment will show
different reaction which some time by mistake is considered as an a social disorder, for example
Tomas Addison Edison was fired from school because of this kind ofsuch behavior.
To some sum up, considering all the above mentioned point, personally I believe we can’t deal with all
the students’ behavior in the same way and we can’t instruct specific procedure to solve student
behavior problem. Considering all the aspects, some time we should tolerate this behavior and may be
in another case we should penalize that and in some occasion we should solve it by the aid of
psychologist or socialogist.
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