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Written Language
is permanent and non-negotiable
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Company
Evaluation
New product
Demand
Topic
What is the document about?
Topic
This report describes the revised maintenance procedures, initiated in March, 2009 and assesses their impact on production capacity.
A topic sentence expands or extends the title. Identifies, introduces or summarizes the topic.
In accordance with the Clause _______, of the Conditions of Contract,we enclose the final details in respect of the event referred to in our notification / letter of _______ .
We write to inform you that the progress of the Works has been suspended by reason of climatic conditions on the Site
The globalization trend is moving programming jobs from Europe and the US to low-labour countries such as China or India. This appears to place computer science research and departments at risk of being considered as working on obsolete technologyHowever, the opposite is true. Computer science is on the verge of a new generation of computing that is leading to innovation not only in computing but also in business, science, and all other endeavours that depend on computing. It could be that this very volatile situation with regard to the l;abour market is of benefit to the industry.
Topic
establish the topic maintain the topic
Washing clothes is simple. First, arrange the clothes into groups according to their colours. In some cases, you may find that one group is sufficient. If you lack a washing machine, you may have to take the clothes to a laundry. It is important not to wash too many clothes at one time because faults in the washing machine may occur. Washing machine repairs are often expensive and time-consuming.
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Washing Clothes
At first, washing clothes may appear complicated; soon however, it will become part of life. It is difficult to imagine dispensing with the need for washing clothes, but, in the future, it may be possible. After you have completed washing the clothes, arrange the clothes into groups according to who owns them and place them in their respective cupboards. In due course, they will be removed and worn again and then the cycle of washing clothes will be repeated.
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Agent
Action
Patient
The cleaner
unimportant
cleans
the floor
A policeman
is going to arrest
that man
unnecessary
Somebody
unknown
has stolen
my wallet
Passive Forms
Patient
(receives the action)
to be
(tense and mood) is are was were has been had been will be must be could be
Past Participle
(action)
The system The machine The house The window The supplier The lens
Active or Passive?
A thorough investigation has been conducted and the causes have been identified. We have conducted a thorough investigation and we have identified the causes.
Active or Passive?
The technicians have identified the following faults:
Technicians Technicians Technicians Technicians
The Contractor shall take every reasonable precaution to protect any section of the Works Every reasonable precaution shall be taken by the Contractor to protect any section of the Works
The Contractor shall give the Engineer, in writing, twenty-one days notice of the date The Engineer shall be given, in writing by the Contractor, twenty-one days notice of the date
Active or Passive
First we subjected the blintzer coils to the Hinzlefetzer stress test. Then we measured the stress effects in bluto units. We found an unusually low aggregation of blutomin in the coil material. Then we initiated another round of tests. Finally, we placed a telephone order for pizza and diet Coke.
Active or Passive
Passive: The form must be signed by the employee to authorize release of physician information to the insurance company.
Active: The employee must sign the form to authorize release of physician information to the insurance company.
Active or Passive
Passive: It should be noted that any change to the procedure must be recorded in the master file. Active/ Imperative: Note: When you change the procedure, record the change in the master file.
Active or Passive
Grammatical Differences
Description Explanation Instruction
WHAT?
WHY? HOW?
Plastic Sheet 1 Metre Smooth Stone Water will collect on underside of plastic sheet
Language
Two
Aspects of Communication
Transactional
The basic message transmitted from the speaker/writer to the listener/reader
Please settle your bill by otherwise we shall have to resort to legal action.
Kindly be advised that failure to effect immediate payment will inevitably lead to the commencement of legal action.
Two
Aspects of Communication
Transactional
The basic message transmitted from the speaker/writer to the listener/reader
Interactional
The reaction elicited by the way in which the message is presented
Transactional Interactional
Transactional language is used to convey "factual or propositional information" and has the primary purpose of "the efficient transference of information". Interactional language, by contrast, is used to establish and maintain social relationships. Discourse Analysis Brown, G and Yule,G (1983)
Sit Down ! Kindly assume a seated position. Would you mind sitting down ? Please take a seat. Would you like to take a seat ?
TAUTOLOGY VERBOSITY
CIRCUMLOCUTION
Ungrammatical
As per your valued recent request, Verbose enclosed herewith please find a copy of the above-mentioned report for your Archaic kind perusal and necessary action. Tautologous OR
Impersonal
Archaic Unfocused
In the event of any enquiries, please do Verbose not hesitate to contact the undersigned. Circumlocutious
Impersonal
We would appreciate it, if you could attend to the above-mentioned Verbose matter at your earliest possible convenience.
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CLEAR: The document can be understood on the first reading. CONCISE: The document is down to an intelligent and intelligible minimum. COMPLETE: All necessary material has been included. CORRECT: The document is accurately written and the points verifiable. COURTEOUS: The document treats the reader with respect.
The five Cs
Communicative
alistair@aksb.com.my
a TENSE afternoon!
Tense
Present Perfect
Simple Past
We accepted the invitation on 25th January.
Simple Past
They cancelled the function on 26th January.
Past Perfect
We had accepted the invitation to the function when they cancelled the function.
Simple Past
The student failed his exam because he played football the whole time.
The student failed his exam because he HAD played football the whole time.
Time Line
PRESENT PERFECT
PAST PERFECT
PRESENT PERFECT
SIMPLE PAST
NOW
Time Line
I have visited Los Angeles.
In / By 1989, I had visited Los Angeles. Since 1989, I have visited Los Angeles.
Iwamatsu Ltd.
was established (establish) in 1935 to Iwamatsu Limited ____________ manufacture machine tools and mining equipment. In 1985, expanded the company ____________ (expand) its production to has developed include farm tractors. Since then, Iwamatsu _____________ (develop) a wide range of sophisticated mining equipment. has grown The workforce ___________ (grow) to its current strength of ranked 15,600 worldwide. In 1995, it __________ (rank) No.4 in the world in the production of construction equipment. have increased (increase) In the last fifteen years, sales __________ totalled by an average of 14% annually. Sales in 1995 __________ (total) 583 billion Yen, which was a jump of 21% over the previous year. has received Since 1965, the company _____________ (receive) the prestigious Bentley Prize for quality control no fewer than seven times.
AC200
was introduced (introduce) onto In 2001, the AC200 ____________ had become the market to replace AC100, which ___________ (become) unable to cope with the increased workload of many users. In was expected 2001, the sustainable market life of the AC200 ___________ have surpassed (expect) to be five years. However, sales ___________ (surpass) expectations. Indeed, in the last twelve months have shown sales ___________ (show) an increase of 12%. In order to capitalise on the success of the AC200, a has been developed (develop) modified version, the AC200e, _____________ will be launched (launch) before the end of this year. and ___________
Dear
Super-Sealer Concrete We would like to draw your attention to Super-Sealer has arrived (arrive) on the Concrete, which [1]__________ Malaysian market within the last month. Yesterday met morning, we [2]__________ (meet) with representatives of Maxwell Mixwell Cement Sdn Bhd, the company which has the sole distribution rights for this product in Malaysia. The MMC representatives showed (show) us samples of this product before [3]________ provided and after mixing and [4]__________ (provide) us with ingredient specifications, a copy of which we are enclosing.
Super-Sealer Concrete contains the water-resistant was developed (be substance Impervion, which [5]_____________ developed) by Swedish scientists in 2002. Since then, has been used (be used) in a variety Impervion [6]_____________ of construction projects with flat concrete roofs, for example, the 35-storey Political Prisoner Rehabilitation Centre in Yangon and the shark-shaped New Sydney Opera House. Super-Sealer Concrete comes with a 25-year warranty against leaks.
presented (present) our proposal When we [7]__________ with estimate of cost to you in October, Superhad not become (not become) Sealer Concrete [8]______________ available in Malaysia. However, we now feel that this concrete would be of great benefit if used in the concrete roofing slabs for both the main office block and the adjacent car park. This would incur an additional cost to you of approximately RM70,000.
Please let us know if you agree to this in principle and we will provide you with a new, detailed estimate to reflect the additional cost. Yours sincerely
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10.
installed; have encountered noticed; had cracked switched; came bought; has serviced began; had used reported; had seen cost; have risen occurred; had forgotten took; have not repaired have replaced; replaced
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Day 2
It was raining and I opened my umbrella.
It was raining so I opened my umbrella.
COHESION
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Anticipations Qualifications Relatives
Microsoft Scandisk
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Relatives
1. Tin, which is one of Malaysias most important natural resources, is exported to many countries. Tin, which is exported to many countries, is one of Malaysias most important natural resources.
2.
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Relative Clause
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P = Principal S = Subordinate R = Relative
Relatives
1.
Tin, which is one of Malaysias most important natural resources, is exported to many countries.
Tin, which is exported to many countries, is one of Malaysias most important natural resources.
Relatives
2.
Tin is mined in Perak, which is one of Malaysias richest states.
Relatives
3.
The price of tin is heavily dependent on world demand, which has fluctuated considerably in recent years.
World demand, on which the price of tin is heavily dependent, has fluctuated considerably in recent years.
Relatives
4.
These fluctuations have seriously affected some tin producers, who have gone out of business. Some tin producers, whom these fluctuations have seriously affected, have gone out of business.
Relatives
5.
Many tin workers, whose tin mines have been closed, have had to look for other work.
Relatives
Par
Capital of France ?
Paris
or
Grammatical Parallelism
Grammatical Parallelism is a term which indicates that all of the items in a list should share the same grammatical feature.
B. Say what is wrong with this and correct it: Post of Marketing Trainee SPM graduate of any discipline Good communication and customer service skills Experience is an ADVANTAGE BUT NOT required Possess drive to succeed Fresh graduates / school leavers are encouraged to apply
C. Say what is wrong with this and correct it: Instructions 1.Switch off the mains power supply 2.Remove the plug from the wall socket 3.Unscrewing of the four nuts marked A 4.The metal cover must be removed 5.Red lever - place in a vertical position
Sample 1
Dismental old unit OB and replace the new unit. After testing, the problem still around. Checking and troubleshooting the have relay separation signal having trouble due to supply and relay not enough current to support the coil induction. Change the different type relay Tested OK, New OB taken back, currently still using old.
Sample 2
Troubleshooting intercom . Checking and trace cable Trace jelly
Sample 3
Send maintenance checklist to Collect maintenance checklist
Sample 4
Quarter yearly service and maintenance for UPS for the month of June 2011 Record the battery reading and UPS condition completed
Sample 5 Install 2 units controller Setting database for mixed mode Testing and commissioning
Welcome back!
Manual of Operations
Accounting software users manual Procedures for manufacturing Owners Operation Manual Human Resource Policies Manual
Manual of Operations
What does it have? What can it do? How to do it?
Manual of Operations
Sequencing
Prerequisites Instructions Warnings
Prerequisites
Warnings
Instructions
Manual of Operations
Lab Reports
Lab Reports
Lab Reports
Title Page Introduction Materials Method Data Results
Analysis Deduction Recommendations Figures and Graphs References
Conclusions Diagnosis
Recommendations Treatment
INTERGON INC
Report on Problems with Machines 3 and 6
Intergon Inc.
Introduction
This report sets out the reasons for the frequent breakdowns on Machine 3 and 6 and identifies the measures to prevent similar recurrences. The problems need to be addressed since there have been hold-ups in production.
Intergon Inc.
Machine 3
Conclusions Inadequate internal 1st level support Poor response time from vendor Training Issues
Operators are not trained prior to machine installation Inadequate number of operators are trained
Intergon Inc.
Machine 3
Conclusions No proper procedures in place
Machine handling Quality assurance Contingency plan for breakdown Duty schedule
Machine 6
Conclusions No regular maintenance No safety measures in place
Workplace Personnel
Intergon Inc.
Recommendations
Train Internal technicians to provide 1st level support Institute training for workforce
Negotiate training package with vendor Introduce peer training by supervisors
Recommendations
Set up quality assurance team Set up Business Continuity and Contingency Plan to include:
Using other machines as temporary replacement Requesting other factories in group to despatch stocks
Intergon Inc.
Recommendations
Introduce insurance scheme for staff Carry out regular maintenance on machines Identify critical machine parts and keep stocks for contingencies Set in place a Duty Schedule and allocate relief staff
Intergon Inc.
Recommendation
It is imperative for the Management to look into the conclusions and the recommendations to solve the frequent breakdowns and delay in production.
Intergon Inc.
Thank You!
All the very best!
Thank You!
A good report is :
(may be understood on the first reading)
CLEAR
CONCISE
COMPLETE CORRECT