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Vague: Precise:
Officers removed a gun from his Police took a .32 caliber automatic
clothing. from his hip pocket.
Properly used, adjectives can help you write good reports. But too many
adjectives result in rich, ornate prose that is hard to digest and is
sometimes nauseating. Read this report of the former First Lady’s state visit
– and weep:
“KYOTO, Japan, May 25 – A blue-white flash of modern magic
today wafted the First Lady of the Philippines away from Tokyo’s withering
clangor to the security of this ancient imperial realm.”
“Fan-twirling geishas danced and sang to the sad thrumming of the
samisen and Mrs. Evangelina Macapagal, with Japanese and Philippine
friends, nibbled succulent yakitori and crisp-coated tempura beside an
emerald lake.
“At the ancient private Nomura gardens a hidden waterfall
whispered amid tall pines and spreading Japanese maples. A white swan
glided with arched wings across the water, dappled only by the movement
of a great, lazy goldfish tasting the cool afternoon air.”
Oftentimes experienced editors become suspicious when they spot
adjective-laden reports. They know that oftentimes adjectives merely cloak
a reporters’ lack of hard facts.
13.Revise and Sharpen
Example:
Shiela Marie B. Tagpis, IV – 1 of T. Paez Integrated
School, bagged the gold medal for having been adjudged
NCR champion in an on-the-spot writing contest
sponsored by the Bureau of Fisheries and Aquatic
Resources on November 15, at the Philamlife Auditorium.
2. One or two additional paragraphs on
the highlights of the story.
Example:
Aside from the gold medal, Tagpis was
awarded a cash prize of P5, 000 for her feat.
She bested contestants from six divisions.
3. Elaboration
Example:
Her winning piece was “Endangered Marine Life: A
National Concern.”
Tagpis was trained by Miss Vanessa T. Cruz, English
Teacher.
Dr. Rosario T. Saludes, principal, was present during
the awarding ceremonies.
The Lead
A special beginning paragraph or paragraphs
are called the lead opens the news story. It answers
the who, what, why, when, where, and how
questions to provide quick identification of persons,
places and events necessary for quick
understanding of the story.
A good lead is short and provocative. As much
as possible, the first paragraph must have only one
sentence. It must come naturally which allows the
rest of the story to flow from it.
Body Development of the News Story